列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise and vary vocabulary to avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating “not to forget” twice.

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list on my smartphone to avoid forgetting anything. For example, I keep a shared checklist with my family so we can add items throughout the week, which saves time when we shop together.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and reduce hesitation. Use linking words to connect reasons and give a specific example of how lists help you. Use varied vocabulary (organize → prioritize, saves time → increases efficiency).

示例: Yes, I use to-do lists for work on my laptop and phone, and they work well. For example, by prioritizing three main tasks each morning, I find I complete more work and meet deadlines more consistently.

建议: Be more general and concise when explaining others’ motives, and avoid focusing excessively on yourself. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and give a clear reason with one brief example. Correct grammar: say “some people avoid them” not “don't do that”.

示例: Some people avoid making lists because they feel stressed if they can't complete everything; for example, ticking off only a few items can feel discouraging, so they prefer flexible planning instead.

建议: Give a clear preference in the topic sentence, then support it with one reason and one contrasting detail using linking words (however, because). Avoid awkward phrasing like “the writing is something on the paper”.

示例: I usually prefer my phone because I often forget paper notes, and digital lists sync across my devices. However, I sometimes write on paper when I need to brainstorm, because handwriting helps me think more creatively.

× I definitely make a list when I go to the shop not to forget to buy everything.

✓ I definitely make a list when I go to the shop so I do not forget to buy anything.

The original sentence uses 'not to forget to buy everything' which is awkward and can imply opposite meaning; restructure with 'so I do not forget' to show purpose and use 'anything' after negative to be natural in English.

× I always make a list on my smartphone, not to forget to bring the list.

✓ I always make a list on my smartphone so I do not forget to bring it.

Use 'on' is acceptable for digital lists, but 'not to forget to bring the list' is awkward. Use 'so I do not forget to bring it' for clear purpose and replace 'the list' with pronoun 'it' for natural reference.

× It's a good way for me.

✓ It's a good way for me.

This sentence is acceptable, but if focusing on grammar types list no change needed. Keep as is.

× It's maybe you mean To Do List, and I really like to do that.

✓ Maybe you mean a to-do list, and I really like to make one.

Original word order 'It's maybe you mean' is incorrect. Use 'Maybe you mean' to introduce clarification. Use article 'a' before 'to-do list' and use 'make one' instead of 'do that' for natural collocation.

× I make A to do list on the notes on my laptop, smartphone and iPad.

✓ I make a to-do list in the Notes app on my laptop, smartphone, and iPad.

Use lowercase 'a' and hyphenate 'to-do'. Use 'in the Notes app' or 'in Notes' rather than 'on the notes'. Add commas in a list for clarity.

× Yeah, it really works well.

✓ Yeah, it really works well.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change required based on listed types.

× It helps me organize and it saves the time.

✓ It helps me organize, and it saves time.

Remove 'the' before 'time' because the phrase 'save time' is idiomatic without the definite article. Also add a comma before 'and' for correct compound sentence punctuation.

× Uh, sometimes when I make a list, I cannot achieve the goal of the list and it's very frustrating.

✓ Sometimes when I make a list, I cannot achieve its goals, and it's very frustrating.

Use 'its goals' to avoid repetition and match singular 'list' with its possessive. Sentence tense is fine; adjust wording for naturalness and clarity.

× So some people don't do that due to this reason.

✓ So some people do not do that for this reason.

Use 'for this reason' or 'because of this' rather than 'due to this reason' which is redundant and unidiomatic.

× So the making a list which I can accomplish easily is important.

✓ So making a list that I can easily accomplish is important.

Remove the extra article 'the' before 'making'. Use 'making a list that I can easily accomplish' for proper relative clause placement and natural adverb position.

× Uh, both are useful for me but I usually I make a list on my phone because I always forget my memo or papers.

✓ Both are useful for me, but I usually make a list on my phone because I always forget my memos or papers.

Remove the duplicated 'I'. Use plural 'memos' when referring to general notes. Add comma before 'but' and correct word order.

× But the writing is something on the paper makes me creative and productive, so I also like to do that.

✓ But writing on paper makes me more creative and productive, so I also like to do that.

Original phrase 'the writing is something on the paper makes me' is ungrammatical. Use gerund 'writing on paper' as subject and add comparative 'more' to natural collocation. This fixes sentence structure and pronoun/article misuse.

× It depends on the situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

This sentence is correct and appropriately uses present tense; no change needed.