列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers like "Umm," and reduce repetition. Add a brief specific detail using a linking word to explain when you use lists. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because I have a poor memory. For example, when I plan a weekly grocery shop I write down meals and quantities so I don't forget anything.

建议: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (agreement and verb forms). Use linking words for coherence (e.g., "because," "so").

示例: Yes, I always make a work list because it helps me manage my time. As a result, I complete tasks on time and rarely miss deadlines.

建议: Clarify your idea and avoid vague or awkward phrasing. Give a clear reason and a brief example or contrast. Use linking words like "because" or "for example," and avoid subjective labels such as "over smart."

示例: I think some people avoid lists because they prefer to rely on memory or feel lists are unnecessary. For example, busy professionals who trust their routines may find making lists slows them down.

建议: Be precise and avoid incorrect comparisons and confusing phrases. State preference with a reason, use one linking phrase, and correct vocabulary (e.g., compare phone to paper, not PayPal).

示例: I prefer using my phone because a notes app is convenient and searchable. For instance, I keep shopping and work lists in Notepad so I don't need to carry paper and can access them anytime.

× Yes, I often make a list while I go for shopping because I have a very short memory.

✓ Yes, I often make a list when I go shopping because I have a very short memory.

Replace 'while I go for shopping' with 'when I go shopping'. 'Go shopping' is the correct verb phrase; 'go for shopping' is unidiomatic and 'while' suggests simultaneous action rather than the habitual time clause 'when'. Use 'when' for habitual occasions.

× Umm, if I have to buy many things I usually make a list of it, but if I just have to buy a few items, I can remember them well.

✓ Umm, if I have to buy many things I usually make a list of them, but if I just have to buy a few items, I can remember them well.

Use the plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'many things'. 'It' is singular and does not agree with the plural antecedent.

× Yes, I have a habit of writing everything up for my schedule of what work I have to do what, uh, at what time.

✓ Yes, I have a habit of writing everything down in my schedule: what work I have to do and at what time.

Replace 'writing everything up for my schedule of what work I have to do what, uh, at what time' with a clearer phrase. Use 'writing everything down' (common collocation) and 'in my schedule' for location. Also reorder to 'what work I have to do and at what time' to make grammatical sense.

× This help me, uh, keep uh, scheduled and maintained and uh, do my task on time.

✓ This helps me keep scheduled and maintain my tasks and do them on time.

Subject 'This' requires singular verb 'helps' (subject-verb agreement). 'Keep scheduled and maintained' is awkward; use 'keep scheduled and maintain my tasks' or simply 'help me stay organized and do my tasks on time'. Also change 'do my task' to plural or 'do my task' with article; here 'tasks' fits context.

× So overall I follow it strictly.

✓ So overall I follow it strictly.

No grammatical number error in this sentence; it is correct as written. No change necessary.

× Some people don't like making list because according to me they are.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because, in my opinion, they are.

'Making list' should be 'making lists' (plural) to match 'some people'. Also 'according to me' is nonnative; use 'in my opinion'. The sentence still sounds elliptical ('they are' needs context) but correction follows quantifier/plural rule.

× They can be very over smart and intelligent that they don't record the necessity to write things up.

✓ They can be very overconfident and think they are so intelligent that they don't see the need to write things down.

Original has awkward structure and incorrect word choice: 'over smart' should be 'overconfident'. Use 'think they are so intelligent that' to introduce a result clause, and 'see the need to write things down' is idiomatic instead of 'record the necessity to write things up'.

× But people like me have to write everything down.

✓ But people like me have to write everything down.

Sentence is grammatically correct; pronoun 'me' in 'people like me' is acceptable. No change needed.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone.

Both 'on my phone' and 'in my phone' can be used; 'on my phone' is acceptable idiomatically. No correction required.

× I have an app on my phone, namely Notepad, where I write everything down.

✓ I have an app on my phone called Notepad where I write everything down.

Using 'named' or 'called' is more natural than 'namely' in this context. 'Namely' is used to specify among alternatives; 'called Notepad' is the natural modifier for an app.

× It's a very useful app and I find my mobile phone to be more convenient than a PayPal.

✓ It's a very useful app and I find my mobile phone to be more convenient than carrying paper.

Comparing 'mobile phone' with 'a PayPal' is illogical; likely intended contrast is 'paper'. Also 'find my mobile phone to be' is wordy but acceptable. Replace 'a PayPal' with 'carrying paper' to make sense.

× It doesn't make me required to carry paper around I use.

✓ It means I don't need to carry paper around.

Original is ungrammatical and wordy. 'It doesn't make me required to carry paper around I use' mixes passive/modal structures incorrectly. Use 'It means I don't need to carry paper around' which is clear and grammatical.