列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "which I really don't need it" and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to vary your vocabulary a bit more.

示例: Yes, I always make a list before shopping because it helps me avoid buying unnecessary items. For example, when I go grocery shopping or buy clothes, the list keeps me focused and saves money.

建议: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it would be better to use linking words to improve coherence, such as 'because' or 'so'. Also, try to avoid repeating words like 'making a list' too often by using synonyms or pronouns.

示例: I work as a registered nurse in long-term care, so I find making a list very helpful because it ensures I don't forget any important tasks related to residents and patients. Usually, I prepare my list before starting my shift.

建议: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and fluent. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and repeated words. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

示例: I believe making lists isn't for everyone. Some people prefer to rely on their memory, especially if they perform the same tasks daily and have gained enough experience to remember them without writing anything down.

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and smoother linking words. Also, try to avoid repeating 'prefer' and 'make a list' too often.

示例: I usually write my lists in a diary before starting work. I prefer paper to my phone because phones are generally not allowed in long-term care settings and hospitals, except during emergencies, so paper is more practical for me.

× I don't want to spend money on unnecessary things which I really don't need it.

✓ I don't want to spend money on unnecessary things which I really don't need.

The pronoun 'it' is redundant because 'things' is already referred to by 'which'. Removing 'it' avoids repetition and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× So for sure I make a list whenever I go for groceries or even doing a shopping for my clothes.

✓ So for sure I make a list whenever I go grocery shopping or even do shopping for my clothes.

The phrase 'go for groceries' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go grocery shopping'. Also, 'doing a shopping' should be 'do shopping' as 'shopping' here is an uncountable noun used without an article.

× I'm working as a registered nurse in the long term care so making a list is really beneficial for me.

✓ I'm working as a registered nurse in long-term care, so making a list is really beneficial for me.

The phrase 'in the long term care' is incorrect; 'long-term care' is a general field and does not require 'the'. Also, 'long-term' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective.

× I really don't want to miss anything which is related to residence and patients, so making a list definitely helps me.

✓ I really don't want to miss anything which is related to residents and patients, so making a list definitely helps me.

The word 'residence' (a place) is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'residents' (people living in the care). Using the correct noun clarifies the meaning.

× I think making a list is not a cup of tea for everybody.

✓ I think making a list is not everyone's cup of tea.

The phrase 'not a cup of tea for everybody' is awkward. The idiomatic expression is 'not everyone's cup of tea', meaning not liked by everyone.

× Some people remember the task they have to do and with experiences and practices I I would say they don't need a list actually because they are doing the same umm tasks every day.

✓ Some people remember the tasks they have to do, and with experience and practice, I would say they don't actually need a list because they do the same tasks every day.

The sentence has redundancy and awkward phrasing. 'Task' should be plural 'tasks' to match 'some people'. 'Experiences and practices' should be singular 'experience and practice' as uncountable nouns. Also, 'doing' should be 'do' to maintain parallel structure.

× I prefer paper over the phone because in long term care setting and even in the hospitals the phones are not allowed.

✓ I prefer paper over the phone because in the long-term care setting and even in hospitals, phones are not allowed.

The phrase 'in long term care setting' requires the definite article 'the' and 'long-term' should be hyphenated. Also, 'in the hospitals' is better as 'in hospitals' for general reference. 'The phones' is better as 'phones' when speaking generally.