列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a reason using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. For example, say 'Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because I tend to forget things. However, sometimes I forget to prepare the list if I am very busy.'

示例: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because I tend to forget things. However, sometimes I forget to prepare the list if I am very busy.

建议: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I make lists daily for my work because I am forgetful. These lists help me remember important tasks and manage my time better.'

示例: Yes, I make lists daily for my work because I am forgetful. These lists help me remember important tasks and manage my time better.

建议: Avoid generalisations and improve sentence structure. Start with a clear opinion and support it logically. For example, say 'Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory or find lists restrictive. They may feel confident managing tasks without writing them down.'

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory or find lists restrictive. They may feel confident managing tasks without writing them down.

建议: Make your answer more natural and coherent by using linking words and clearer sentences. For example, say 'I prefer making lists on my smartphone because I always carry it with me. It is more convenient than carrying a diary or paper notes.'

示例: I prefer making lists on my smartphone because I always carry it with me. It is more convenient than carrying a diary or paper notes.

× Yes, I am a forgetful person that's why I need to make list when I shop.

✓ Yes, I am a forgetful person, that's why I need to make a list when I shop.

The noun 'list' is countable and singular here, so it requires the indefinite article 'a'. Without 'a', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× But sometime I also forget to make lists because I'm very busy person.

✓ But sometimes I also forget to make lists because I'm a very busy person.

The word 'sometime' should be plural 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'busy person' is singular and countable, so it needs the article 'a' before it.

× In my daily basis I use to make list for my work because I really need this type of list because I am very forgetful person that's why I need this type of list because I forgot all the type of my important works that I really need to do.

✓ On a daily basis, I use to make lists for my work because I really need this type of list since I am a very forgetful person. That's why I need this type of list because I forget all types of my important work that I really need to do.

The phrase 'daily basis' requires the preposition 'on'. 'Make list' should be 'make lists' to match plural usage. 'Forgetful person' needs the article 'a'. 'Forgot' should be 'forget' to match present tense. 'All the type' should be 'all types' and 'important works' should be 'important work' as 'work' is uncountable here.

× In my daily basis I use to make list for my work because I really need this type of list because I am very forgetful person that's why I need this type of list because I forgot all the type of my important works that I really need to do.

✓ On a daily basis, I use to make lists for my work because I really need this type of list since I am a very forgetful person. That's why I need this type of list because I forget all types of my important work that I really need to do.

The correct preposition is 'on' for the phrase 'on a daily basis'. Using 'in' is incorrect in this context.

× Usually every people like to making lists because everyone need this, but those who don't like that the main reason of they are very intelligent and they do not need any type of list for their work.

✓ Usually, every person likes making lists because everyone needs this, but those who don't like that, the main reason is that they are very intelligent and do not need any type of list for their work.

'Every people' is incorrect; it should be 'every person' as 'every' is used with singular nouns. 'Like to making' should be 'likes making' to correct verb form and subject-verb agreement. 'Everyone need' should be 'everyone needs'. 'The main reason of they are' should be 'the main reason is that they are'.

× Usually every people like to making lists because everyone need this, but those who don't like that the main reason of they are very intelligent and they do not need any type of list for their work.

✓ Usually, every person likes making lists because everyone needs this, but those who don't like that, the main reason is that they are very intelligent and do not need any type of list for their work.

The verbs 'like' and 'need' must agree with singular subjects 'every person' and 'everyone', so they should be 'likes' and 'needs' respectively.

× Usually every people like to making lists because everyone need this, but those who don't like that the main reason of they are very intelligent and they do not need any type of list for their work.

✓ Usually, every person likes making lists because everyone needs this, but those who don't like that, the main reason is that they are very intelligent and do not need any type of list for their work.

The phrase 'the main reason of they are' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'the main reason is that they are' to properly connect the clause.

× Usually every people like to making lists because everyone need this, but those who don't like that the main reason of they are very intelligent and they do not need any type of list for their work.

✓ Usually, every person likes making lists because everyone needs this, but those who don't like that, the main reason is that they are very intelligent and do not need any type of list for their work.

The pronoun 'they' is used incorrectly after 'the main reason of'. It should be 'that they are' to correctly introduce the clause.

× Point of view Everyone wants to make lists and usually every person carry their phone.

✓ From my point of view, everyone wants to make lists and usually every person carries their phone.

The phrase 'Point of view' is incomplete and needs the preposition 'From my' to be correct. Also, 'carry' should be 'carries' for subject-verb agreement.

× Point of view Everyone wants to make lists and usually every person carry their phone.

✓ From my point of view, everyone wants to make lists and usually every person carries their phone.

The verb 'carry' must agree with the singular subject 'every person', so it should be 'carries'.

× That's why I prefer to make a list in my smartphone because every time I cannot take a diary or a note paper with me.

✓ That's why I prefer to make a list on my smartphone because I cannot always carry a diary or a notebook with me.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect for devices; 'on' is used with smartphones. 'Note paper' is better expressed as 'notebook'. Also, 'every time I cannot take' is awkward; 'I cannot always carry' is clearer.