列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma thulo sentence haru cha ra kehi shabda haru barambar prayog bhayeko cha. Tapai le sentence haru lai chhoto ra spashta banayera, pratyek sentence ma ek matra vichar sametnu parcha. English ma 'shopping list' lai ek patak matra bhannu parcha ra 'memory power is lost' ko sato 'I have a poor memory' bhannu ramro huncha.

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before going to the supermarket because I have a poor memory. Without a list, I might forget important items. This helps me shop efficiently and avoid unnecessary purchases.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma kehi shabda haru galat cha jastai 'leash' ko sato 'list' bhannu parcha. Sentence haru spashta ra sangaathit banau, ra linking words jastai 'because' ra 'so' ko prayog garera uttar lai ramro banau. English ma 'Remember Me' ko sato 'reminds me' bhannu parcha.

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me save time and focus better. It also reminds me of the tasks I need to complete during working hours.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma grammar ra sentence structure ma sudhar garnu parcha. 'doesn't' ko sato 'don't' prayog garnu parcha. Sentence haru lai chhoto ra spashta banayera, ra linking words jastai 'because' ra 'however' ko sahi prayog garnu parcha.

示例: I think some people don't like making lists because they can remember their tasks easily. Others might be lazy to prepare lists. However, I prefer making lists because my memory is not very good.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma kehi shabda haru barambar cha ra sentence haru lamo ra alikati aspaṣṭa cha. Tapai le sentence haru lai chhoto ra spashta banayera, ra linking words jastai 'because' ra 'so' ko sahi prayog garnu parcha. 'works' ko sato 'tasks' bhannu ramro huncha.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it with me. This way, I can easily check which tasks I have completed and which ones are left. So, I usually write my notes on my phone.

× Of course I make a list of the shopping list which I have to buy in the supermarket or and replace because my memory power is lost.

✓ Of course I make a list of the items which I have to buy in the supermarket or replace because my memory power is lost.

The phrase 'a list of the shopping list' is redundant and incorrect. 'Shopping list' is singular, but the intended meaning is a list of items to buy, so 'items' (plural) is appropriate here. Also, 'or and replace' is confusing; 'or replace' is sufficient.

× So I will probably remember one or two things and maybe I could have I would have forgotten what I should buy it.

✓ So I will probably remember one or two things, but maybe I would have forgotten what I should buy.

The sentence mixes tenses and has redundant modal verbs. 'Could have I would have' is incorrect; 'would have' alone suffices. Also, 'buy it' is unnecessary; 'buy' is enough.

× Yes, I make leash for my working schedule because it has me.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my working schedule because it helps me.

'Leash' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'list'. Also, 'it has me' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'it helps me'.

× It has me to save the time and focus more on work which and and Remember Me what I should do during the job hour.

✓ It helps me save time and focus more on work, and reminds me what I should do during working hours.

'It has me to save the time' is incorrect; 'helps me save time' is correct. 'Remember Me' should be 'reminds me'. 'Job hour' is better expressed as 'working hours'.

× I guess some people doesn't need to make a list of their job of their working schedule because they can they can remember what they have to do on the time.

✓ I guess some people don't need to make a list of their work schedule because they can remember what they have to do on time.

'Doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with plural 'people'. 'Job of their working schedule' is redundant; 'work schedule' is better. 'On the time' should be 'on time'.

× Or maybe they are just lazy about doing about making the list for their working schedule.

✓ Or maybe they are just lazy about making the list for their work schedule.

The phrase 'lazy about doing about making' is redundant and incorrect. Simplify to 'lazy about making'.

× However, in my in my context I am my memory power is low, so.

✓ However, in my case, my memory power is low, so I make lists.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. 'In my in my context' is redundant; 'in my case' is better. The sentence needs completion for clarity.

× I prefer making the list in my phone because I carry my phone every time and every time wherever I need to go and so I can just check out what what works did I have left or what works will I do now.

✓ I prefer making the list on my phone because I carry it all the time wherever I go, so I can just check what tasks I have left or what tasks I will do now.

The correct preposition is 'on' for devices like phones. 'Every time and every time wherever I need to go' is redundant; 'all the time wherever I go' is better. 'Works' should be 'tasks' or 'work'.

× So I usually write down the notes in my phone.

✓ So I usually write down notes on my phone.

'The notes' is unnecessary; 'notes' is sufficient. Also, 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone'.