列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use the present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'it helped me to be focused' say 'it helps me to focus'. Also, simplify phrases like 'not spending unnecessary in products which might not need it' to 'avoid buying unnecessary items'. Keep your sentences clear and concise.

示例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me to focus on what I need and avoid buying unnecessary items. This way, I stay organised and save time.

建议: Use present tense consistently and avoid repetition, such as 'to to'. Also, link your ideas more smoothly. For example, use 'which helps me organise my day better and reduces stress from unexpected tasks.'

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work because I am a dentist and need to know the treatments planned for the day, which helps me organise my day better and reduces stress from unexpected tasks.

建议: Avoid vague endings and incomplete ideas. Instead of 'Another reason can be simply,' complete your thought. Also, use linking words like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' to structure your answer clearly.

示例: Some people don't like making lists because they feel pressured by what is coming. Firstly, they prefer to go with the flow without planning. Secondly, they might find lists too restrictive or time-consuming.

建议: Improve sentence structure and clarity. For example, say 'I prefer making lists on my phone because it helps me stay organised and is easily accessible since I always have my phone with me.' Avoid repeating phrases like 'very easy accessible'.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it helps me stay organised and is easily accessible since I always have my phone with me.

× Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helped me to be focused in what I need to buy and not spending unnecessary in products which might not need it and that helped me to be more organized and to save time.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me to be focused on what I need to buy and not spend unnecessarily on products which I might not need, and that helps me to be more organised and to save time.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'helped' when describing a habitual action. Since the action is habitual and ongoing, the present tense 'helps' is appropriate. Also, 'focused in' should be 'focused on', and 'not spending unnecessary in products' should be 'not spend unnecessarily on products' to use correct verb forms and prepositions.

× Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helped me to be focused in what I need to buy and not spending unnecessary in products which might not need it and that helped me to be more organized and to save time.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me to be focused on what I need to buy and not spend unnecessarily on products which I might not need, and that helps me to be more organised and to save time.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used after 'focused'; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, 'unnecessary in products' is incorrect; it should be 'unnecessarily on products' to correctly express the idea.

× Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helped me to be focused in what I need to buy and not spending unnecessary in products which might not need it and that helped me to be more organized and to save time.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me to be focused on what I need to buy and not spend unnecessarily on products which I might not need, and that helps me to be more organised and to save time.

The phrase 'products which might not need it' is incorrect because the pronoun 'it' does not agree with the plural noun 'products'. It should be 'products which I might not need' to correctly refer to the subject.

× Yes, I make a list for my work as I work with people. I am a dentist and I want to know what treatment I have planned for the day. So that helped me to to organize the day better and not to be stressed from unknown things.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my work as I work with people. I am a dentist and I want to know what treatment I have planned for the day. So that helps me to organise the day better and not to be stressed by unknown things.

The phrase 'that helped me' incorrectly uses past tense when the context suggests a present habitual action. It should be 'that helps me'. Also, 'stressed from unknown things' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'stressed by'.

× So that helped me to to organize the day better and not to be stressed from unknown things.

✓ So that helps me to organise the day better and not to be stressed by unknown things.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used after 'stressed'; the correct preposition is 'by' to indicate the cause of stress.

× Maybe because they feel pressure of what is coming. So for some people it works better just to to go without planning and to see how it goes. So that is one of the reason. Another reason can be simply.

✓ Maybe because they feel pressure about what is coming. So for some people, it works better just to go without planning and see how it goes. So that is one of the reasons. Another reason can be simple.

'Pressure of' should be 'pressure about' to correctly express the feeling. The phrase 'just to to go' has a repeated 'to' which is incorrect. 'One of the reason' should be plural 'reasons' because 'one of' requires a plural noun. 'Another reason can be simply' is incorrect; 'simply' is an adverb and should be replaced with the adjective 'simple'.

× Maybe because they feel pressure of what is coming.

✓ Maybe because they feel pressure about what is coming.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used after 'pressure'; the correct preposition is 'about' to indicate the subject of the pressure.

× So for some people it works better just to to go without planning and to see how it goes.

✓ So for some people, it works better just to go without planning and see how it goes.

The repeated 'to' is a typographical error and should be removed. Also, the second 'to' before 'see' is unnecessary and should be omitted for parallel structure.

× So that is one of the reason.

✓ So that is one of the reasons.

'One of' must be followed by a plural noun, so 'reason' should be pluralised to 'reasons'.

× Another reason can be simply.

✓ Another reason can be simple.

'Simply' is an adverb, but here an adjective is needed to describe 'reason'. Therefore, 'simple' is the correct form.

× I prefer a phone list better as the company to be more organized and it's very easy accessible.

✓ I prefer a phone list better as the company is more organised and it's very easily accessible.

The phrase 'as the company to be more organized' is incorrect; it should be 'as the company is more organised' to form a proper clause. Also, 'easy accessible' should be 'easily accessible' because 'accessible' is an adjective modified by an adverb 'easily'.

× I prefer a phone list better as the company to be more organized and it's very easy accessible.

✓ I prefer a phone list better as the company is more organised and it's very easily accessible.

'Easy' is an adjective and cannot modify 'accessible' here; the adverb 'easily' is required to correctly modify the adjective 'accessible'.

× Very easy accessible as nowadays we have the phone everywhere with us and I can check whatever I need.

✓ It is very easily accessible as nowadays we have the phone everywhere with us and I can check whatever I need.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'It is' completes the sentence. Also, 'easy accessible' should be 'easily accessible' as explained before.