列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid redundancy and incorrect word usage like 'passage' instead of 'purchase'. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, keep your sentences concise and directly related to the question.

示例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping. For example, a few days ago, I forgot to buy some vegetables because I didn't have a list. Since then, I make sure to write down everything I need before going to the market.

建议: Your answer should be more structured and clear. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'then' properly to show sequence. Also, avoid vague phrases and try to explain how making lists helps you complete your work effectively.

示例: Yes, I make lists to organize my homework. For example, a few days ago, I wrote down all the questions I needed to answer. Then, I ticked each one off my notebook as I completed them, which helped me stay focused.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more naturally and logically. Avoid confusing phrases like 'they are they do not tend to make list'. Also, explain reasons clearly and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: In my opinion, some people avoid making lists because they believe they have a strong memory and can remember everything. Additionally, some may feel that making lists is unnecessary or time-consuming.

建议: Your answer does not directly address the question about paper or phone lists. Instead, you talk about memory. Try to answer the question clearly and provide reasons. Also, correct grammar and use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is convenient and easy to carry. However, sometimes I don't make lists at all because I trust my memory, especially for small shopping trips.

× Whenever I tend to passage something, I always make a list.

✓ Whenever I tend to purchase something, I always make a list.

The word 'passage' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'purchase' which means to buy something. 'Passage' is a noun and does not fit the context.

× This because a few days ago I was about to buy some vegetables and bananas to consume.

✓ This is because a few days ago I was about to buy some vegetables and bananas to consume.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'This'. Without it, the sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect.

× However, whenever I arrived in the market, I forgot it.

✓ However, when I arrived at the market, I forgot it.

The word 'whenever' is not appropriate here; 'when' is better to indicate a specific past event. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'at' for 'market'.

× After that I started making a list whenever.

✓ After that, I started making a list every time.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'whenever' which is incomplete. 'Every time' is a clearer expression to indicate repetition.

× Whenever I tend to complete my homework, I make some lists.

✓ Whenever I tend to complete my homework, I make a list.

'Some lists' is incorrect because usually one list is made for homework tasks. Using 'a list' is more appropriate.

× For an instance, a few days ago I was completing a assignment, then when I completed one of the questions, I wrote one on my notebook, then whenever I completed another.

✓ For instance, a few days ago I was completing an assignment; when I completed one of the questions, I wrote it in my notebook, then whenever I completed another.

'An instance' should be 'For instance'. 'A assignment' should be 'an assignment' because 'assignment' starts with a vowel sound. Also, 'wrote one on my notebook' is unclear; 'wrote it in my notebook' is better. The sentence structure is improved with punctuation.

× From my observation, I have seen numerous people that they are they do not tend to make list.

✓ From my observation, I have seen numerous people who do not tend to make lists.

The phrase 'people that they are they' is redundant and incorrect. 'People who' is the correct relative pronoun. Also, 'make list' should be 'make lists' for plural consistency.

× Maybe this is because they think they are strong minded people.

✓ Maybe this is because they think they are strong-minded people.

'Strong minded' should be hyphenated as 'strong-minded' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× They can remember everything as well as some people are aggressive.

✓ They can remember everything, and some people are aggressive.

'As well as' is not appropriate to connect two independent clauses here. Using 'and' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× As a result they do not tend to make a list.

✓ As a result, they do not tend to make lists.

Since 'people' is plural, 'lists' should be plural to match the subject.

× Honestly, not this, because I'm a young person and I strongly believe that I can remember everything.

✓ Honestly, not this, because I'm a young person and I strongly believe I can remember everything.

The phrase 'that I can remember' is correct but can be simplified by removing 'that' for smoother flow.

× To illustrate, a few days ago my mother declared that by some vegetables from the market and I just went there and I could still remember the things which are needed to be purchased.

✓ To illustrate, a few days ago my mother told me to buy some vegetables from the market, and I just went there and could still remember the things that needed to be purchased.

'Declared that by some vegetables' is incorrect; 'told me to buy some vegetables' is correct. Also, 'which are needed' should be 'that needed' to maintain past tense consistency.