列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: In English (Bhutan), try to make your answer more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details without redundancy. Avoid repeating similar ideas and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

示例: I usually don't go shopping because my family members do it. However, when I shop, I like to make a list on paper to ensure I buy all the necessary fruits and vegetables.

建议: In English (Bhutan), try to answer directly and clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about how making lists helps you. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure for clarity.

示例: I don't usually make lists for work, but I make study lists before exams. This helps me finish all chapters on time, and if I have extra time, I review my practice exercises.

建议: In English (Bhutan), try to express your opinion clearly with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons logically and avoid hesitation phrases like 'I'm not sure'.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to remember items mentally. Also, they might find writing lists boring or unnecessary.

建议: In English (Bhutan), answer directly and avoid filler words like 'oh' or 'yeah'. Use clear sentences and linking words to explain your preference logically and concisely.

示例: I prefer making lists on paper because it is easy to carry and helps me remember what to buy without relying on my phone.

× Well, I usually don't go for shopping and most of the time my parents and my elder sisters go for shopping.

✓ Well, I usually don't go shopping and most of the time my parents and my elder sisters go shopping.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' because 'go' is followed by the verb in -ing form without 'for'. This is a common collocation in English.

× I used to make a list for my studies when the exam approaches near so that I could complete all the chapter and time.

✓ I used to make a list for my studies when the exam approached so that I could complete all the chapters in time.

The verb 'approaches' should be in past tense 'approached' to match 'used to' which refers to past habits. Also, 'chapter' should be plural 'chapters' and 'and time' is incorrect; it should be 'in time' to indicate completing before the deadline.

× And if there is extra time I used to review my practices again.

✓ And if there was extra time, I used to review my practice again.

The phrase 'if there is extra time' should be 'if there was extra time' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'practices' is better as 'practice' here because 'practice' is an uncountable noun referring to repeated exercises.

× I'm not sure about that, but I think they could keep the shopping list on their mind and might be there feeling bored or they don't feel like writing it making a list.

✓ I'm not sure about that, but I think they could keep the shopping list in their mind and might be feeling bored or they don't feel like making a list.

The phrase 'on their mind' should be 'in their mind'. 'There feeling bored' is incorrect; it should be 'they might be feeling bored'. Also, 'writing it making a list' is incorrect; it should be 'making a list'.

× Oh, well, it's an interesting question. I would prefer to make a list on paper as yeah, we can take it anywhere in hand and we won't be even forgetting what are all those lists we're supposed to buy? Yeah, I prefer.

✓ Oh, well, it's an interesting question. I would prefer to make a list on paper because we can take it anywhere in hand and we won't even forget what all those lists are that we're supposed to buy. Yeah, I prefer that.

The adverb 'even' is misplaced; it should be before 'forget'. The phrase 'what are all those lists' is incorrect word order; it should be 'what all those lists are'. Also, 'as yeah' is informal and unclear; 'because' is better. The sentence ending with 'Yeah, I prefer.' is incomplete; adding 'that' clarifies the meaning.