列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevabınız doğal ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve ifadeler var. "taking fun of shopping" ifadesi yanlış kullanılmış, "taking the fun out of shopping" olmalı. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı ve mantıklı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanabilirsiniz. Cümlenizi 3-4 cümle ile sınırlı tutup, daha spesifik detaylar ekleyebilirsiniz.

示例: I usually don't make a shopping list because I feel it takes the fun out of shopping. Instead, I try to remember what I need before leaving home. When I am at the store, I think carefully about what to buy to avoid unnecessary purchases.

建议: Cevabınızda mantıklı bir yapı var ancak bazı ifadeler daha doğal hale getirilebilir. "Because of that reason" yerine "Therefore" veya "Because of that" kullanabilirsiniz. Ayrıca, "we always make lists and we update lists" ifadesi tekrarlı, "we always make and update lists" daha uygun olur. Bağlaçları kullanarak cümlenizi daha akıcı yapabilirsiniz.

示例: Yes, at my current job, my boss is very strict and values discipline. Therefore, every morning we have a meeting to discuss the day's tasks. We always make and update lists to track our progress effectively.

建议: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi ve ifade hataları var. "making let's take too much time" ifadesi yanlış, "making lists takes too much time" olmalı. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha net ve akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız. Detayları daha spesifik ve mantıklı şekilde açıklayabilirsiniz.

示例: I think some people dislike making lists because it takes too much time. However, lists help bring discipline to work. They allow you to track your progress and make improvements in your tasks.

建议: Cevabınız anlaşılır ancak bazı ifadeler daha doğal olabilir. "in digital environment it can get erased by mistake" yerine "in a digital environment, lists can be accidentally deleted" daha uygun olur. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanabilirsiniz. Detayları daha spesifik hale getirin.

示例: I prefer making lists on paper because in a digital environment, lists can be accidentally deleted or lost if you forget your account details. Therefore, keeping them on paper feels safer and more visible to me.

× Actually, I don't prefer making lists because it's taking fun of shopping.

✓ Actually, I don't prefer making lists because it takes the fun out of shopping.

The phrase 'it's taking fun of shopping' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'it takes the fun out of shopping'. 'Take' is used here in the simple present tense to express a general truth, and the phrase 'take the fun out of' means to remove enjoyment from something.

× Because of that reason, every morning we have a meeting about that day's works and we always make lists and we update lists based on our improvements about our tasks.

✓ Because of that reason, every morning we have a meeting about that day's work and we always make lists and update them based on our improvements in our tasks.

The word 'works' is incorrect here; 'work' is an uncountable noun when referring to tasks or job duties. Also, 'lists' is repeated unnecessarily; 'update them' is more natural. 'Improvements about our tasks' should be 'improvements in our tasks' to use the correct preposition.

× I think it's because of making let's take too much time, but also it brings a discipline at the work.

✓ I think it's because making lists takes too much time, but also it brings discipline at work.

The phrase 'because of making let's take too much time' is incorrect. It should be 'because making lists takes too much time'. 'Let's take' is incorrect here; 'takes' is the correct verb form for third person singular. Also, 'a discipline' is incorrect; 'discipline' is uncountable here, and 'at the work' should be 'at work'.

× You can see your progress for these tasks and you can make lots of improvements about your tasks.

✓ You can see your progress in these tasks and you can make lots of improvements to your tasks.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect with 'progress'; the correct preposition is 'in'. Also, 'improvements about your tasks' should be 'improvements to your tasks' to correctly express making changes to tasks.

× I prefer making lists on paper because in digital environment it can get erased by mistake or you can lose it like you can forget a username or password of your account.

✓ I prefer making lists on paper because in a digital environment they can be erased by mistake or you can lose them, like forgetting a username or password of your account.

The phrase 'in digital environment' needs the article 'a' to be correct: 'in a digital environment'. Also, 'it can get erased' should be 'they can be erased' to agree with the plural 'lists'. 'You can lose it like you can forget' is awkward; better is 'you can lose them, like forgetting'.