列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「when when」や「about the things what I have to buy」は不自然です。より自然で効果的な表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。

示例: I usually don't make a shopping list because I can remember what I need. Also, I decide what to buy when I see the items in the store.

建议: 回答が不完全で意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して明確に答え、理由や具体例を加えて説明する必要があります。文法の誤りも多いため、簡潔で正確な文を心がけましょう。

示例: I don't usually make a list for my work because I prefer to handle tasks as they come. However, sometimes making a list helps me stay organized.

建议: 意見は述べていますが、理由や具体例が不十分で、文法的な誤りもあります。より具体的な理由を述べ、例を明確に説明することで説得力を高めましょう。

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel it restricts their freedom. For example, if I follow a list strictly, I might miss spontaneous opportunities.

建议: 回答は明確で理由も述べていますが、「whenever and whenever I am」などの表現が不自然です。繰り返しを避け、より自然な表現を使いましょう。

示例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I can check them anytime and anywhere. This helps me remember everything I need to do.

× I usually don't make a list when when I shop because I can memorize about the things what I have to buy.

✓ I usually don't make a list when I shop because I can memorize the things I have to buy.

The phrase 'about the things what I have to buy' is incorrect. 'About' is unnecessary here, and 'what' should be replaced with 'that' or omitted. Also, 'when when' is a repetition error. The corrected sentence removes 'about' and 'what' and the repeated 'when'.

× Also when I see the items in the shop.

✓ Also, I decide when I see the items in the shop.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and subject. Adding 'I decide' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× I don't make a list for my work and because if I make a list for work it doesn't work my task and when I work, when I'm working I always.

✓ I don't make a list for my work because if I do, it doesn't help me with my tasks, and when I work, I always...

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. 'And because' is redundant. 'It doesn't work my task' is incorrect; it should be 'it doesn't help me with my tasks'. The sentence ends abruptly; the correction improves clarity and structure.

× I'm not sure that some people don't like make a list, but I think it's too strict for them.

✓ I'm not sure that some people don't like making a list, but I think it's too strict for them.

After 'like', the verb should be in the gerund form '-ing'. 'Like make' is incorrect; it should be 'like making'.

× For example, when I make a list, I cannot attend.

✓ For example, when I make a list, I cannot attend to unexpected events.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'to unexpected events' clarifies what the speaker cannot attend to when making a list.

× I'd prefer to make a list on my phone because I can check the list whenever and whenever I am.

✓ I'd prefer to make a list on my phone because I can check the list whenever and wherever I am.

The phrase 'whenever I am' is incorrect; it should be 'wherever I am' to indicate any place. 'Whenever' refers to time, 'wherever' to place.