列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 文法の誤りや冗長な表現を避け、より自然で効果的な英語表現を使うことが重要です。例えば、"what I what I should buy"は不自然なので、"what I should buy"に修正しましょう。また、"many kind of clothes pretty"は語順や表現が不自然なので、"many kinds of pretty clothes"のように言い換えると良いです。

示例: Yes, I make a list when I go to the supermarket because it helps me remember what I need to buy. However, I don't make a list when I visit a shopping mall because I want to enjoy looking at many kinds of pretty clothes.

建议: 文が不完全で意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。明確な主語と動詞を使い、文を完結させることが必要です。また、"pray"は文脈に合わないので避けましょう。さらに、接続詞を使って論理的に説明をつなげると良いです。

示例: Yes, I make a list when I study because it helps me clearly understand what I need to do. Also, it allows me to prioritize my tasks effectively.

建议: 文法ミスや語彙の誤用が多く、意味が不明瞭です。"least"は"list"の誤りと思われるので正しく使いましょう。また、理由を明確にし、感情や結果を具体的に説明することが大切です。

示例: I think some people don't like making lists because if they fail to complete them, they feel stressed and depressed. Without a list, they can feel more relaxed and enjoy their lives freely.

建议: "prefer make"は"prefer to make"に修正し、"home phone"は"mobile phone"や"smartphone"に言い換えましょう。また、"take a note what I want to release"は意味が不明瞭なので、"note down what I want to buy"など具体的に表現すると良いです。

示例: I prefer to make a list on my smartphone because I always carry it with me. It's easy to note down what I want to buy and to check my list whenever I want.

× Yes, I make a list when I go to the supermarket because it helps me to remember all things what I what I should buy.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I go to the supermarket because it helps me to remember all the things that I should buy.

The phrase 'all things what I what I should buy' is incorrect. 'Things' should be preceded by 'the' to specify, and 'what I what I' is a repetition and incorrect relative pronoun usage. It should be 'that I should buy' to correctly link the clause.

× But when I go to the shopping mall I don't make list because I want to enjoy seeing many kind of clothes pretty.

✓ But when I go to the shopping mall, I don't make a list because I want to enjoy seeing many kinds of pretty clothes.

The phrase 'many kind of clothes pretty' has multiple errors: 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types, 'clothes' is plural and should be preceded by 'kinds of', and 'pretty' should be placed before 'clothes' as an adjective. Also, 'make list' needs an article 'a'.

× Yes, I make a list when I study for example, because I can I can think my about myself what I should do clearly and pray I can prioritize the tasks so it.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I study, for example, because I can think about what I should do clearly and I can prioritize the tasks.

The phrase 'think my about myself what I should do clearly and pray I can prioritize the tasks so it' is ungrammatical. 'Think my about myself' is incorrect; it should be 'think about'. 'Pray' is likely a misused word here and should be omitted. The sentence is also fragmented and needs restructuring for clarity.

× I think it's because when they don't don't succeed doing the least, they feel depressed and stressful, without least they can do freely and enjoy their lives more.

✓ I think it's because when they don't succeed in doing the list, they feel depressed and stressed; without a list, they can do things freely and enjoy their lives more.

The word 'least' is incorrect; it should be 'list'. 'Stressful' describes something causing stress, but here the feeling is 'stressed'. Also, 'without least' should be 'without a list'. The phrase 'do freely' is vague and better expressed as 'do things freely'.

× I prefer make a list on my home phone because I always bring my phone so it's easy to to take a note what I want to release and also it's easy to reflect my list whenever I want.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I always bring it, so it's easy to take notes of what I want to remember and also easy to review my list whenever I want.

'Prefer make' should be 'prefer to make'. 'On my home phone' is unnatural; 'on my phone' is better. 'Take a note what I want to release' is incorrect; it should be 'take notes of what I want to remember'. 'Reflect my list' is incorrect; 'review my list' is appropriate.