列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using simpler sentence structures and avoiding repetition. Also, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and provide a brief reason or example to support your answer.

示例: No, I don't usually make a list when I go shopping because I prefer to buy things spontaneously based on what I need at the moment.

建议: Improve fluency by avoiding filler words like 'like' and repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly and provide specific examples to support your points.

示例: Yes, I usually make a detailed schedule to break big tasks into smaller, manageable parts. This method helps me write essays more efficiently and improves the quality of my work.

建议: Focus on clarity and grammatical accuracy. Use linking words to organise your ideas logically and avoid repetition. Provide specific reasons with clear explanations.

示例: Some people might not like making lists because they are confident in their memory and believe they can remember everything. Others may feel they don't have enough time to make lists or prefer to manage their time differently.

建议: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for better fluency. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a concise, clear answer.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is portable and I always have it with me. This way, I don't need to carry extra paper or pens, which makes it very convenient.

× Well, I'm not the person like do the plan or do the plan, so I'm not always make a list when I go shopping.

✓ Well, I'm not the person who likes to make a plan, so I don't always make a list when I go shopping.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'like do the plan' which is ungrammatical. The correct relative pronoun 'who' should be used with 'likes to make a plan' to express preference. Also, 'I'm not always make' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't always make' to match subject-verb agreement and tense.

× Well, I will do a like a schedule to like make a detailed plan to break the big task to small and doable pieces.

✓ Well, I will make a schedule to create a detailed plan to break the big task into small and doable pieces.

The phrase 'do a like a schedule' is awkward and ungrammatical; 'make a schedule' is correct. Also, 'like make' is unnecessary and should be replaced with 'create' or 'make'. The preposition 'to' before 'small' should be 'into' to indicate division into parts.

× I think it's quite useful for me to help me to write my write the essay for the assessment more efficiently and with a good quality.

✓ I think it's quite useful to help me write my essay for the assessment more efficiently and with good quality.

The phrase 'help me to write my write the essay' is redundant and contains a repeated word 'write'. Also, 'with a good quality' is better expressed as 'with good quality'. The pronoun usage is corrected for clarity and conciseness.

× Well, I'm not sure, maybe they just be they don't have time and they be quite confident, quite confident that they got a good memory, can just remember what they need when like when they go to shop and also maybe some people just like do the time management.

✓ Well, I'm not sure, maybe they just don't have time and are quite confident that they have a good memory and can just remember what they need when they go shopping. Also, maybe some people just don't like to do time management.

The original sentence misuses 'be' instead of appropriate verb forms. 'They just be they don't have time' is incorrect; it should be 'they just don't have time'. 'They be quite confident' should be 'are quite confident'. 'Got a good memory' should be 'have a good memory'. 'When they go to shop' should be 'when they go shopping'. The phrase 'like do the time management' is incorrect; it should be 'don't like to do time management'.

× Well, I think I will make a list on my phone 'cause it's quite convenient because the phone is portable and I take the phone almost every day and I'm using the phone.

✓ Well, I think I will make a list on my phone because it's quite convenient since the phone is portable, and I take it almost every day and use it regularly.

The phrase 'I take the phone almost every day and I'm using the phone' is awkward and repetitive. 'Take the phone' is better expressed as 'take it'. Also, 'I'm using the phone' is better as 'use it regularly' for clarity and naturalness. The conjunction 'cause' is informal; 'because' is preferred in formal speech.

× I don't need another pen or paper to write things down and I I can write a list.

✓ I don't need another pen or paper to write things down, and I can write a list on my phone.

The sentence has a repeated 'I' and lacks clarity about where the list is written. Adding a comma before 'and' improves readability. Specifying 'on my phone' clarifies the context. Removing the repeated 'I' corrects the sentence structure.