列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct sentence structures and avoiding redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. For example, explain why making a list helps you remember items and organize your shopping.

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember everything I need. For instance, sometimes people forget what to buy, but having a list makes it easier to find and purchase all the items.

建议: Improve clarity by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to explain how making lists helps in your work. Avoid vague phrases and be more specific about how the list helps you.

示例: Yes, I often make lists at work because I am an electrical and procurement engineer. For example, I create schedules to organize all the materials needed for my projects, which helps me manage purchases efficiently.

建议: Make your answer more concise and natural by using correct grammar and clearer explanations. Start with a direct answer, then explain reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid long, confusing sentences.

示例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer window shopping. They buy things spontaneously and decide what to purchase later, so they don't feel the need to prepare a list.

建议: Answer more directly and clearly by stating your preference first, then explaining why. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas. Avoid unnecessary phrases and improve sentence flow.

示例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because almost everyone has a smartphone nowadays. It is easier and more convenient than using paper lists.

× Of course when I go to for market so I make the list proper way to easy for buy me everything.

✓ Of course, when I go to the market, I make the list in a proper way to easily buy everything.

The phrase 'go to for market' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the market'. Also, 'make the list proper way' needs the preposition 'in' to become 'make the list in a proper way'. Additionally, 'to easy for buy me everything' is incorrect; it should be 'to easily buy everything'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So even sometime people forget what I have to buy.

✓ Sometimes people forget what I have to buy.

The word 'even' is unnecessary here and 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct without 'even' and with the correct adverb form.

× So that is easy to find out the which one you want to buy.

✓ So it is easy to find out which one you want to buy.

The phrase 'the which one' is incorrect; 'which one' is sufficient. Also, 'that is easy' should be 'it is easy' to refer to the situation. These changes correct pronoun usage and improve sentence flow.

× Yes sure I make the list when I work sometime.

✓ Yes, sure, I make the list sometimes when I work.

The adverb 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, commas after 'Yes' and 'sure' improve readability.

× Suppose I am electrical engineer so I have to buy some things for my project.

✓ Suppose I am an electrical engineer, so I have to buy some things for my project.

The noun 'electrical engineer' requires the indefinite article 'an' because it begins with a vowel sound. Adding a comma before 'so' improves sentence structure.

× So I am also procurement engineer so I make the schedule in proper way for all materials to easily.

✓ I am also a procurement engineer, so I make the schedule in a proper way for all materials easily.

The noun 'procurement engineer' needs the indefinite article 'a'. The phrase 'in proper way' requires the article 'a' to become 'in a proper way'. The adverb 'easily' should be placed at the end for clarity.

× Yes, sometime I see that mostly people don't like to make the list because they don't concern to what they have to buy only they go for window shopping to which one he will buy and for next time then they will go and buy for other things.

✓ Yes, sometimes I see that most people don't like to make a list because they don't pay attention to what they have to buy; they only go window shopping to decide which one they will buy, and next time they go and buy other things.

The adverb 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'Mostly people' should be 'most people'. The phrase 'don't concern to' is incorrect; it should be 'don't pay attention to'. 'Go for window shopping to which one he will buy' is awkward; it is better as 'go window shopping to decide which one they will buy'. Also, pronouns should be consistent ('they' instead of 'he'). The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So that's why they don't make.

✓ So that's why they don't make lists.

The verb 'make' requires an object here; 'lists' is the correct object to complete the sentence meaningfully.

× Oh, very nice question.

✓ Oh, a very nice question.

The phrase 'very nice question' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× This one today, nowadays we will see.

✓ Nowadays, we see this a lot.

The original sentence is unclear and awkward. Rephrasing to 'Nowadays, we see this a lot' makes it clearer and grammatically correct.

× So this is the smart phone every people have in hand.

✓ So this is the smartphone everyone has in their hand.

'Every people' is incorrect; it should be 'everyone'. Also, 'smart phone' is better as one word 'smartphone'. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with 'everyone' (singular). 'In hand' is better as 'in their hand' for clarity.

× So it's easy to make in phone.

✓ So it's easy to make on the phone.

The correct preposition with 'phone' in this context is 'on', not 'in'. Also, adding 'the' before 'phone' is necessary.

× So in proper way.

✓ So in a proper way.

The phrase 'in proper way' requires the indefinite article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× So nobody I think in this day will use the paper.

✓ So I think nobody uses paper these days.

The sentence structure is awkward. Reordering to 'I think nobody uses paper these days' is clearer and grammatically correct. 'In this day' is better expressed as 'these days'. Also, 'use' should be 'uses' to agree with 'nobody' (singular).