列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but lacks clarity and natural flow. Try to form complete sentences and avoid fragments like 'Buy clothes, foods.' Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember what I need to buy, such as clothes and food items.

建议: Your answer is a bit long and contains grammatical errors. Try to be concise and use correct verb forms. Also, avoid unnecessary apologies and focus on clear, direct responses.

示例: I don't have a job, but I make lists for my studies at university. They help me remember important information from lectures and lessons.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'MMM' and unclear phrases like 'but isn't right.' Express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I think some people dislike making lists because it takes time, but I believe it's useful since it helps with remembering important information.

建议: Your answer is mostly clear but could be more concise and structured. Avoid vague phrases like 'thing to be surprised.' Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone or iPad because I love technology. However, I sometimes use paper to write messages for my girlfriend as a surprise.

× Buy clothes, foods.

✓ Buy clothes and food.

The word 'foods' is generally uncountable when referring to types of food collectively, so 'food' is correct here. Also, 'Buy clothes, foods.' is a fragment and lacks a verb; it should be connected properly to the previous sentence or rephrased.

× Actually I am not working but I make list for my studying because I am a student in a university and it's helped me for remember any information in the lectures and lessons what I have gone in the school, the university.

✓ Actually, I am not working but I make a list for my studying because I am a student at a university and it has helped me remember any information in the lectures and lessons I have attended at school and university.

The phrase 'make list' needs the indefinite article 'a' before 'list'. 'In a university' should be 'at a university' to indicate attendance. 'It's helped me for remember' is incorrect; it should be 'it has helped me remember'. Also, 'what I have gone in the school, the university' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'I have attended at school and university'.

× MMM actually I don't know, but in my opinion some people don't like making lists because it takes time but isn't right.

✓ MMM, actually I don't know, but in my opinion some people don't like making lists because it takes time, but that isn't right.

The sentence lacks a subject after 'but' in the second clause. Adding 'that' clarifies the meaning. Also, a comma is needed after 'MMM' and before 'but' to improve readability.

× I use phone and my iPad for writing the information and lists.

✓ I use my phone and iPad to write information and lists.

The phrase 'use phone' needs the possessive 'my phone'. Also, 'for writing' is better expressed as 'to write' in this context. 'The information' is better as 'information' without 'the' because it is general.

× And sometimes I use paper when I write a message for my girlfriend or thing to be surprised.

✓ And sometimes I use paper when I write a message for my girlfriend or something to surprise her.

'Thing to be surprised' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'something to surprise her' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'use paper' is acceptable but could be more specific as 'use paper to write'.