列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid repetition and redundancy in your answers. Also, structure your response clearly with a topic sentence followed by supporting details. For example, start by stating that you make a list, then explain why and how you do it, using linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go to the store because it helps me remember everything I need. For instance, I check my home to see what items are running low, especially groceries, so I don't forget anything important.

建议: Focus on giving a clear and concise answer without filler words like 'umm'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples to support your answer. Also, avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily.

示例: Yes, I use the notes app on my phone to list my daily, weekly, and monthly tasks. This method works well because I can easily add new tasks whenever I remember them, which helps me stay organized.

建议: Clarify your ideas and avoid unclear or incorrect phrases like 'feel respected and their and their plan'. Use linking words to explain reasons logically and provide specific reasons why some people dislike making lists.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel restricted by schedules. For example, they believe that following a list limits their creativity and spontaneity, so they prefer to work more freely.

建议: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear preference with reasons and examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because it is more convenient. Unlike paper lists, I don't have to carry anything extra, and I can check my list anytime, which is especially helpful when I go shopping.

× Yes, I love making making a list of material that I need to buy before I go go for shopping and this way I will not forget anything to shop and I always look at my home if I need anything.

✓ Yes, I love making a list of materials that I need to buy before I go shopping, and this way I will not forget anything to buy. I always check at home if I need anything.

The phrase 'making making' is a repetition error and should be corrected to a single 'making'. The phrase 'go go for shopping' is also repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'go shopping'. 'Material' should be pluralized to 'materials' to match the context of multiple items. 'Forget anything to shop' is incorrect; it should be 'forget anything to buy'. 'Look at my home' is better expressed as 'check at home' to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, I love making making a list of material that I need to buy before I go go for shopping and this way I will not forget anything to shop and I always look at my home if I need anything.

✓ Yes, I love making a list of materials that I need to buy before I go shopping, and this way I will not forget anything to buy. I always check at home if I need anything.

The word 'material' should be pluralized to 'materials' because it refers to multiple items to be bought. Using the singular form here is incorrect when referring to a list of items.

× Yes, I like to make notes in my notes app in my mobile phone about the pending work that I need to do on a daily basis or on weekly or monthly basis.

✓ Yes, I like making notes in my notes app on my mobile phone about the pending work that I need to do on a daily, weekly, or monthly basis.

The phrase 'like to make' can be better expressed as 'like making' to indicate a habitual action. Also, 'in my mobile phone' should be 'on my mobile phone' as apps are accessed on devices. The phrase 'on a daily basis or on weekly or monthly basis' is better streamlined to 'on a daily, weekly, or monthly basis' for clarity and correctness.

× Umm it definitely works because umm, every time I put a note in the file, note in the notes app if I remember anything for example.

✓ Umm, it definitely works because every time I put a note in the notes app if I remember anything, for example.

The phrase 'put a note in the file, note in the notes app' is redundant and confusing. It should be simplified to 'put a note in the notes app'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by removing unnecessary commas and clarifying the flow.

× I think some of the people do not like to make lists because they sometimes feel respected and their and their plan.

✓ I think some people do not like to make lists because they sometimes feel restricted by their plan.

The phrase 'feel respected and their and their plan' is incorrect and unclear. Likely, the intended meaning is 'feel restricted by their plan'. Also, 'some of the people' is better expressed as 'some people' for naturalness.

× And if they make the plan according to the list or according or according to a schedule, they will not be able to do any creative thing.

✓ If they make the plan according to the list or according to a schedule, they will not be able to do anything creative.

The phrase 'according or according to' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'according to'. Also, 'any creative thing' is better expressed as 'anything creative' for natural English usage.

× They will just follow their plan and work according.

✓ They will just follow their plan and work accordingly.

The phrase 'work according' is incomplete and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'work accordingly', which means to work in a way that matches the plan.

× I usually like to make a list on my mobile phone because it's more convenient.

✓ I usually like to make lists on my mobile phone because it's more convenient.

Since the context is about making lists in general, the plural 'lists' is more appropriate than the singular 'a list' to express habitual action.

× I can see anytime if I if I make a a list on my on a paper or on my on my notebook.

✓ I can check anytime if I have made a list on paper or in my notebook.

The phrase 'see anytime if I make a list' is awkward; 'check anytime if I have made a list' is clearer. Also, 'on a paper' should be 'on paper' and 'on my notebook' should be 'in my notebook' as lists are written inside notebooks.

× I always need need to bring a paper or a notebook with me whenever I need to go somewhere or need to go shopping.

✓ I always need to bring paper or a notebook with me whenever I need to go somewhere or go shopping.

The phrase 'a paper' is incorrect; 'paper' is uncountable here and does not need an article. Also, the repetition 'need need' is a mistake and should be corrected to a single 'need'.