列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Instead of 'I do write a list' say 'I usually make a list'. Also, avoid redundancy like 'writing in a paper reminds me to buy this particular item' which can be simplified. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because I often forget things. Writing them down helps me remember exactly what to buy, so it really helps me stay organised.

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Use a clear topic sentence and link your ideas logically. Avoid phrases like 'I decide what to write' twice. Also, explain briefly why it works or how you improve it for clarity.

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work to organise my tasks. It usually helps me stay focused and complete my work efficiently, although sometimes I need to adjust my list to improve productivity.

建议: Avoid repeating 'they feel' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, explain your opinion more clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. Try to be more specific about why some people dislike lists.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming and prefer to remember things mentally. I understand this view to some extent, as keeping important points in mind can be effective for some tasks.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' effectively to connect your reasons smoothly.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it with me, so it's easily accessible and less likely to be lost compared to paper lists.

× Yes, I do write a list because I often forget things, so by writing in a paper reminds me to buy this particular item.

✓ Yes, I do write a list because I often forget things, so writing on a paper reminds me to buy this particular item.

The phrase 'by writing in a paper' is incorrect. The correct form is 'writing on a paper' because we write on the surface of paper, not in it. Also, 'by writing' followed by 'reminds me' is awkward; using 'writing on a paper reminds me' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I do write a list because I often forget things, so by writing in a paper reminds me to buy this particular item.

✓ Yes, I do write a list because I often forget things, so writing on a paper reminds me to buy this particular item.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'paper'. The correct preposition is 'on' because we write on the surface of paper, not inside it.

× Yes, I decide what to write on a piece of paper to decide what should I do next, and it works almost every time.

✓ Yes, I decide what to write on a piece of paper to decide what I should do next, and it works almost every time.

In indirect questions, the word order should be subject + verb, not auxiliary verb + subject. 'What should I do next' is a direct question form; it should be 'what I should do next' in this sentence.

× Because they feel that it's a burden and they feel writing on a piece of paper is waste of time.

✓ Because they feel that it's a burden and they feel writing on a piece of paper is a waste of time.

The phrase 'is waste of time' is missing the article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'is a waste of time'.

× And I agree with that people, because we have to keep some things in mind.

✓ And I agree with those people, because we have to keep some things in mind.

The demonstrative pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used with 'people'. The correct form is 'those people' to refer to the previously mentioned group.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because I carry my phone everywhere I go and it's easily accessible so that I cannot lose the phone.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I carry my phone everywhere I go and it's easily accessible so I cannot lose the phone.

The phrase 'so that I cannot lose the phone' is incorrect here. 'So' is sufficient to indicate result; 'so that' is used to express purpose. Hence, 'so I cannot lose the phone' is correct.