列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答表达了主要意思，但语法和表达不够自然，句子结构有些混乱。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复表达，并使用更地道的表达方式。

示例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because it helps me budget my money and remember what I need to buy, so I don't forget anything.

建议: 回答中时态混用且句子结构不清晰，表达不够连贯。建议使用正确的时态，简洁明了地表达观点，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: Yes, when I was 14 or 15, I had a lot of homework, so I made a list to organize my tasks. This helped me finish my homework more quickly and efficiently, improving the quality of my work.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，逻辑混乱。建议理清句子结构，使用连接词，避免重复，并准确表达观点。

示例: Some people don't like making lists because they think it takes too much time or they believe their memory is good enough to remember everything without writing it down.

建议: 回答内容丰富且有具体例子，但句子稍显冗长，部分表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，使用更地道的表达方式。

示例: I prefer making lists on paper. For example, during a trip with my friends last year, I used a black and white pen to highlight the places we wanted to visit and decorated the notebook with stickers to make it more appealing.

× Yes, I usually make a list when I go to the supermarket because it tells me to budget my money and help me to remember what I want to buy. That's I cannot forget things.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list when I go to the supermarket because it helps me budget my money and remember what I want to buy. That way, I cannot forget things.

原句中“because it tells me to budget my money and help me to remember”结构不完整且不通顺，应改为“helps me budget my money and remember”使句子结构正确且表达清晰。

× Yes, when I was 14 or 15 there are a lot of homework to do so I make a list and each line that I want I need to finished so that I can help me to finish my homework more quickly and efficiency.

✓ Yes, when I was 14 or 15 there was a lot of homework to do, so I made a list and for each item I needed to finish it so that it could help me finish my homework more quickly and efficiently.

原句中“there are a lot of homework”时态和主谓不一致，应改为过去时“there was a lot of homework”；“homework”是不可数名词，不能用复数形式；“I make”应改为过去时“I made”；“need to finished”应为“needed to finish”；“help me to finish”应改为“help me finish”；“efficiency”应为副词“efficiently”。

× Yes, when I was 14 or 15 there are a lot of homework to do so I make a list and each line that I want I need to finished so that I can help me to finish my homework more quickly and efficiency.

✓ Yes, when I was 14 or 15 there was a lot of homework to do, so I made a list and for each item I needed to finish it so that it could help me finish my homework more quickly and efficiently.

原句中“so that I can help me to finish”中“help me”前的主语“I”不合适，应改为“it could help me”，使代词使用正确。

× Yes, when I was 14 or 15 there are a lot of homework to do so I make a list and each line that I want I need to finished so that I can help me to finish my homework more quickly and efficiency.

✓ Yes, when I was 14 or 15 there was a lot of homework to do, so I made a list and for each item I needed to finish it so that it could help me finish my homework more quickly and efficiently.

原句中“more quickly and efficiency”中“efficiency”是名词，应改为副词“efficiently”，以修饰动词“finish”。

× Because some people think making list is time consuming and they are lazy and others think they have a good memories to me to remember everything they want to do they need so they don't list the things.

✓ Because some people think making lists is time-consuming and they are lazy, and others think they have good memories to remember everything they want to do, so they don't make lists.

原句中“making list”应为复数“making lists”；“time consuming”应加连字符“time-consuming”；“a good memories”中“memories”是复数，前面不应加不定冠词“a”；“to me to remember”结构不正确，应删去；“they don't list the things”表达不准确，应改为“they don't make lists”。

× Because some people think making list is time consuming and they are lazy and others think they have a good memories to me to remember everything they want to do they need so they don't list the things.

✓ Because some people think making lists is time-consuming and they are lazy, and others think they have good memories to remember everything they want to do, so they don't make lists.

原句中“making list”应为复数“making lists”，因为指的是一般的列表行为；“a good memories”中“memories”是复数，前面不应加不定冠词“a”。

× Because some people think making list is time consuming and they are lazy and others think they have a good memories to me to remember everything they want to do they need so they don't list the things.

✓ Because some people think making lists is time-consuming and they are lazy, and others think they have good memories to remember everything they want to do, so they don't make lists.

原句中“to me to remember”结构不正确，且“they don't list the things”表达不准确，应改为“they don't make lists”，使代词和动词使用正确。

× I prefer to make a list on paper.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper.

该句无语法错误，介词使用正确。

× For example, I went to a trip with my friends last year and I used the black and white pen to highlight the place we want to go, and I put some stickers on the notebook to make it more adorable.

✓ For example, I went on a trip with my friends last year and I used a black and white pen to highlight the places we wanted to go, and I put some stickers on the notebook to make it more adorable.

“went to a trip”应改为“went on a trip”，介词用法错误；“the black and white pen”改为“不定冠词a black and white pen”，因为是首次提及；“the place we want to go”时态应与过去时一致，改为“the places we wanted to go”。