列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 文法の誤り（"when I shopping"や"makes me don't forget"）を修正し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、具体的な理由や効果を明確に述べることで説得力が増します。

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember everything I need. For example, I usually write the list on paper so I don't forget any items.

建议: 文の主語が抜けている部分（"Helps me not to forgot"）を修正し、文をつなげる接続詞を使って流れを良くしましょう。具体的な効果も明確に述べると良いです。

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me not to forget anything important. For example, I usually write my schedule on my phone, so I can work more efficiently.

建议: 理由の説明が不明瞭で文法も不自然です。"fixed schedule"の意味を明確にし、なぜそれがストレスになるのかを具体的に説明しましょう。

示例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be free and flexible. Having a fixed schedule can make them feel uncomfortable and stressed.

建议: 文が途中で切れており、意味が伝わりにくいです。理由を明確にし、文法や語順を正しく整えましょう。

示例: I prefer to make lists on paper because it's easier to write down my thoughts and stay organized. This method makes me feel more comfortable than using my phone.

× Yes I do when I shopping because it makes me don't forget my shopping list.

✓ Yes, I do when I am shopping because it helps me not to forget my shopping list.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'when I shopping' instead of the correct present continuous form 'when I am shopping'. Also, 'makes me don't forget' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me not to forget' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× For example I make list to write in paper.

✓ For example, I make a list to write on paper.

The noun 'list' is countable and singular here, so it requires the article 'a'. Also, the preposition 'in' is incorrect; 'on paper' is the correct phrase.

× Helps me not to forgot anything important.

✓ It helps me not to forget anything important.

The sentence lacks a subject; 'Helps me' is incomplete. Adding 'It' as the subject corrects the sentence. Also, 'forgot' is past tense; the base form 'forget' is needed after 'to'.

× Helps me not to forgot anything important.

✓ It helps me not to forget anything important.

The verb 'forgot' is past tense, but after 'to' the base form 'forget' should be used.

× I usually write my working schedule in my telephone.

✓ I usually write my work schedule on my phone.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'on my phone' is the correct phrase. Also, 'working schedule' is better expressed as 'work schedule', and 'telephone' is more naturally 'phone'.

× Because they don't like fixed schedule, they are free.

✓ Because they don't like fixed schedules, they prefer to be free.

The noun 'schedule' should be plural 'schedules' to match the context. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'prefer to be free' clarifies the meaning.

× It helps them feel uncomfortable and stress this way.

✓ It makes them feel uncomfortable and stressed this way.

The verb 'helps' is incorrect here; 'makes' is appropriate to express causing a feeling. Also, 'stress' should be the adjective 'stressed' to describe their feeling.

× I prefer to make a list on paper because it's easy to put on words and stay organize.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper because it's easy to put into words and stay organized.

The phrase 'put on words' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'put into words'. Also, 'stay organize' should be 'stay organized' (adjective form).

× My schedule This way makes me feel comfortable and this method rather than.

✓ This way of scheduling makes me feel comfortable, and I prefer this method.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it to a complete sentence clarifies the meaning and improves flow.