列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Votre réponse manque de fluidité et contient des erreurs grammaticales qui nuisent à la clarté. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire, suivie d'une explication concise, en évitant les répétitions et les erreurs.

示例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because I tend to forget items. It helps me stay organized and ensures I buy everything I need.

建议: Votre réponse est un peu confuse et manque de cohérence. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour clarifier vos idées et évitez les contradictions apparentes. Structurez votre réponse avec une idée principale suivie d'explications claires.

示例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized. Although I don't always follow it strictly, it guides me to complete my daily tasks effectively.

建议: Votre réponse contient des erreurs grammaticales et manque de clarté. Essayez de formuler des phrases complètes et cohérentes, en utilisant des mots de liaison pour exprimer vos idées clairement.

示例: I think some people dislike making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous and live day by day. Also, making a list can be stressful as it reminds them of all the tasks they have to do.

建议: Votre réponse est claire mais pourrait être améliorée en évitant les répétitions et en utilisant des phrases plus fluides. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre discours plus naturel.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always have it with me. It's more practical than paper, which I might forget, so I can check my list anytime during the day.

× Yes, I often make a list when I shop because I always forget something and it's more practical this way it's. I need.

✓ Yes, I often make a list when I shop because I always forget something and it's more practical this way.

The original sentence contains a fragment 'it's. I need.' which is incomplete and disrupts the sentence structure. Removing this fragment corrects the sentence and makes it coherent.

× OK, always make a list for my work because I need to be organised, which I'm usually not so I don't respect the list, but it helped me do what I need to do in the day.

✓ OK, I always make a list for my work because I need to be organised, which I'm usually not, so I don't always follow the list, but it helps me do what I need to do during the day.

The original sentence lacks the subject 'I' at the beginning and has awkward phrasing such as 'don't respect the list' and 'helped me do'. Adding the subject and correcting verb tenses and expressions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I believe because there are spontaneous people, they like to live day by day, which stop me.

✓ I believe it's because there are spontaneous people who like to live day by day, which stops me.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'which stop me' where the subject is singular ('which' refers to 'living day by day'). Also, the sentence lacks clarity and proper conjunctions. Adding 'it's' and changing 'stop' to 'stops' corrects subject-verb agreement and improves sentence flow.

× I understand them and sometimes it can be stressful to make a list.

✓ I understand them, and sometimes it can be stressful to make a list.

A comma is needed before the conjunction 'and' to properly connect two independent clauses, improving sentence structure.

× You see everything that you have to do. So your your head's not does not work like that.

✓ You see everything that you have to do, so your head does not work like that.

The original sentence has redundancy ('your your head's not does not') and is split awkwardly. Removing redundancy and combining the sentences with proper conjunction improves clarity and grammar.