列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because I tend to forget things quickly. For example, before I go to the store, I write down all the items I need, which helps me stay organized and avoid missing anything.

建议: Focus on directly answering the question with clear and grammatically correct sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about how making a list helps your work.

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work every day. After waking up and exercising, I plan the tasks I need to complete, which helps me stay focused and manage my time effectively.

建议: Improve clarity by using simpler sentence structures and clearer explanations. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: I think some people dislike making lists because it takes extra time and effort. Also, they might feel that lists don't help them stay organized, so they prefer other methods.

建议: Make your answer more natural by using correct verb tenses and avoiding repetition. Start with a clear preference statement and support it with specific reasons using linking words.

示例: I used to prefer making lists on paper when I was a child. However, nowadays I prefer using my smartphone because it's more convenient and I can easily update my lists anytime.

× Yes, I am a person who forgot all things in a very short time.

✓ Yes, I am a person who forgets all things in a very short time.

The verb 'forgot' is in the past tense, but the sentence describes a habitual action, so the present tense 'forget' should be used with the third person singular form 'forgets'. This corrects the tense to match the meaning.

× So when I have go for shopping so I make a list for Remember Me what products I want to buy so it helps me.

✓ So when I have to go shopping, I make a list to remind me what products I want to buy, so it helps me.

The phrase 'have go' is incorrect; it should be 'have to go' to express obligation. Also, 'Remember Me' should be 'remind me' to correctly express the purpose of the list. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× So really I made this.

✓ So really I do this.

The original sentence uses past tense 'made' but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'do' is appropriate to indicate a regular habit.

× Yes, I delay wake up in three hours and do some exercise and after I remember that what type of work I want to do in the day and I make a list for my work and really it's work.

✓ Yes, I wake up late by three hours and do some exercise, and after that, I remember what type of work I want to do during the day and make a list for my work, and really it works.

The phrase 'delay wake up in three hours' is incorrect; 'wake up late by three hours' is clearer. Also, 'it's work' should be 'it works' to indicate effectiveness. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct adverb placement.

× Everyone has a different reason and this sentence.

✓ Everyone has a different reason for this statement.

The phrase 'and this sentence' is unclear and incorrect. Replacing it with 'for this statement' clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun usage.

× So I think that is some people don't like to make list because of the thing that it has a lot of work to make a list and they hope it is not work properly.

✓ So I think that some people don't like to make lists because it takes a lot of effort to make a list and they hope it does not work properly.

The phrase 'that is some people' is incorrect; it should be 'that some people'. Also, 'hope it is not work properly' is incorrect; 'hope it does not work properly' is grammatically correct but semantically odd. Possibly 'think it will not work properly' is better. The sentence is corrected for conjunction and verb usage.

× So I think that is some people don't like to make list because of the thing that it has a lot of work to make a list and they hope it is not work properly.

✓ So I think that some people don't like to make lists because it takes a lot of effort to make a list and they think it will not work properly.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' when referring generally. Also, 'hope' is replaced with 'think' to better express the idea. The sentence is corrected for singular/plural agreement and verb usage.

× When I was a child, I like to make a list on paper, but now in a modern world, all people are busy.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to make lists on paper, but now in the modern world, everyone is busy.

The verb 'like' should be in past tense 'liked' to match 'was'. 'A list' is changed to plural 'lists' for generality. 'In a modern world' is corrected to 'in the modern world' to specify the known concept. 'All people' is better expressed as 'everyone'.

× In their technological world, all people are using mobile phone and smartphone.

✓ In today's technological world, everyone uses mobile phones and smartphones.

'In their technological world' is vague; 'in today's technological world' is clearer. 'All people are using' is better as 'everyone uses' for general statements. 'Mobile phone and smartphone' should be plural 'mobile phones and smartphones'.

× So I also like to make list on my mobile phone.

✓ So I also like to make lists on my mobile phone.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' when referring to the general activity of making lists. This corrects the singular/plural agreement.