列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repeating words like 'lots of lots of' and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, directly answer the question first before adding details.

示例: I don't usually make a list when I shop because I'm not very picky. However, if I find something useful and affordable, I prefer to buy it right away.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be improved by linking your ideas more smoothly and avoiding short, choppy sentences. Also, explain how making lists creates a friendly environment and helps cooperation for more specific content.

示例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized and focused. Moreover, by sharing my list with colleagues, it fosters a friendly environment and improves our cooperation.

建议: Try to avoid grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific reasons why people dislike making lists.

示例: That's a tough question, but I think many people find making lists tiring and boring. Additionally, some may feel lazy or unmotivated to organize their tasks this way.

建议: Your answer has some unclear points and contradictions. Avoid saying 'helps me stay unmotivated.' Also, explain clearly why paper is faster and more convenient, and avoid fragmented sentences.

示例: Personally, I prefer making lists on paper because it's faster and more convenient for me. Also, writing by hand helps me stay focused and active.

× Not quite often.

✓ Not quite often.

The phrase 'Not quite often' is awkward but not grammatically incorrect. It would be better to say 'Not very often' for clarity, but this is a style issue rather than a grammar problem listed.

× But I'm not so picky in choosing lots of lots of objects.

✓ But I'm not so picky in choosing lots of objects.

The repetition 'lots of lots of' is redundant and incorrect. 'Lots of objects' is the correct plural form. The error is a redundancy rather than a pluralization error, but removing the extra 'lots of' corrects the sentence.

× But when there's when there's something that is useful and affordable, I'd like to choose this object and purchase it immediately.

✓ But when there's something that is useful and affordable, I'd like to choose this object and purchase it immediately.

The phrase 'there's when there's' is a repetition error. Removing the repeated 'when there's' corrects the sentence. This relates to the use of 'there is' (there's) correctly.

× This allows me to stay organized and helps me stay motivated and focus in my work.

✓ This allows me to stay organized and helps me stay motivated and focus on my work.

The verb 'focus' is followed by the preposition 'on' when indicating the object of focus. Using 'in' is incorrect here.

× This creates a really friendly environment. And helps me cooperate with other people.

✓ This creates a really friendly environment and helps me cooperate with other people.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally discouraged in formal writing. Combining the two sentences improves sentence structure and flow.

× This really a tough question.

✓ This is really a tough question.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' which is necessary for the sentence to be complete.

× But mostly becauses it is.

✓ But mostly because it is.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; the correct word is 'because'. This is a spelling error affecting conjunction usage.

× Really tiring and boring.

✓ It is really tiring and boring.

This is a sentence fragment missing a subject and verb. Adding 'It is' completes the sentence.

× And sometimes the they are so lazy and making lists for their jobs, for their work and studies.

✓ And sometimes they are so lazy to make lists for their jobs, their work, and studies.

The phrase 'the they' is incorrect; 'they' alone is correct. Also, 'making lists' should be 'to make lists' to fit the sentence structure.

× Personally, I'd like to make a list or on paper.

✓ Personally, I'd like to make a list on paper.

The phrase 'make a list or on paper' is incorrect; 'or' should be removed to correctly express preference.

× One of the main reasons is that it is faster and more convenient.

✓ One of the main reasons is that it is faster and more convenient.

This sentence is correct as is.

× The other reason is that it helps me. Strengthen my muscles and helps me stay active and unmotivated.

✓ The other reason is that it helps me strengthen my muscles and stay active and motivated.

The period after 'helps me' incorrectly splits the sentence. Also, 'unmotivated' is the opposite of the intended meaning; 'motivated' is correct.