列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use clearer and more natural English sentences. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear words like 'sobby'. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because I tend to forget the items I need. Making a list helps me stay organized and prevents me from buying unnecessary things.

建议: Improve sentence structure and grammar to make your answer clearer. Avoid short, incomplete sentences. Explain your ideas with linking words and provide reasons for your opinion.

示例: I sometimes make a list for my work, but only at the beginning. However, it doesn't really work for me because I usually don't follow it.

建议: Use more natural and fluent sentences. Avoid repeating words and fragmented sentences. Provide clear reasons with linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: In my opinion, some people don't like making lists because they believe they have a good memory and can remember everything without writing it down.

建议: Make your sentences clearer and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically and provide specific advantages of using your phone for lists.

示例: I always prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more convenient and efficient. It saves time and I can easily edit the list whenever I want.

× Yes, I always make a list when I shopped that sobby 'cause I tend to forget what I am.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I shop that hobby because I tend to forget what I am.

The verb 'shopped' is in the past tense, but the sentence context requires present tense 'shop' to match 'I always make a list'. Also, 'sobby' seems to be a mispronunciation or typo for 'hobby'. The phrase 'what I am' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be 'what I need' or similar, but since it is unclear, it is left as is.

× The items I need to live, so making a list helps me organize.

✓ The items I need to live; so making a list helps me organize.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks proper connection. Using a semicolon or combining the sentence properly improves clarity.

× And prevents me from. Purchasing unnecessary things.

✓ And it prevents me from purchasing unnecessary things.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly split. Adding 'it' and removing the period improves sentence structure.

× Which says.

✓ Which saves money.

The phrase 'Which says' is incomplete and unclear. Likely intended to mean 'which saves money' or similar. Correction assumes intended meaning for clarity.

× I do make a list when I work. But. It's just the first time I do it, just a past time.

✓ I do make a list when I work. But it's just the first time I did it, just a pastime.

The phrase 'just a past time' is incorrect; 'pastime' is the correct noun. Also, 'I do it' should be past tense 'I did it' to match 'first time'.

× And it doesn't really work with me. Becaused. I usually don't follow it.

✓ And it doesn't really work for me because I usually don't follow it.

'Becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'work with me' is better expressed as 'work for me'.

× In my opinion, that's because they think that. They will never forget the list that they have written in their mind.

✓ In my opinion, that's because they think they will never forget the list they have written in their mind.

The sentence is fragmented unnecessarily. Combining the clauses improves flow and clarity.

× So. Maybe they think their memory is. Very good that they don't have to make less like any normal paper person.

✓ So maybe they think their memory is very good and that they don't have to make lists like a normal paper person.

'Make less' is incorrect; it should be 'make lists'. Also, sentence fragments and awkward phrasing are corrected for clarity.

× I always prefer to make a list on my phone.

✓ I always prefer to make a list on my phone.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× That's becauses it's more convenient and efficient and more thought and it's not more time.

✓ That's because it's more convenient, efficient, and faster, and it doesn't take more time.

'Becauses' is a typo for 'because'. The phrase 'more thought' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'faster' or 'more efficient' fits better. 'It's not more time' is awkward; corrected to 'it doesn't take more time' for clarity.