列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

示例: I usually don't make a list when I shop because I have a good memory for the items I need. However, if I have to buy many things at once, I prefer to make a list to ensure I don't forget anything.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Make sure to answer directly and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Provide specific reasons and avoid vague phrases like 'on my tips now'.

示例: I don't usually make lists for my work because the tasks are few and routine. Besides, I have a good memory, so I can easily remember what I need to do each day.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide more specific reasons. Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence structure.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they have a good memory and prefer to remember things mentally. Additionally, they may feel that making lists wastes time that could be spent on other tasks.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but contains errors and unclear phrases. Use correct vocabulary ('era' instead of 'error') and improve sentence structure. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words.

示例: Since we live in a technological era, I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is always with me. In contrast, paper lists can be easily lost or forgotten.

× Well as I have a shop my shop memory so there is no need to make a list for me as I can remember all the things properly.

✓ Well, as I have a good memory, there is no need for me to make a list as I can remember all the things properly.

The phrase 'shop my shop memory' is incorrect and unclear. The correct preposition is 'for me' instead of 'to me' when expressing necessity. Also, 'as I have a good memory' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× But if there would be a time when I have to buy a numerous things then I acquired property to make a list so I so it will help me to remind everything.

✓ But if there is a time when I have to buy numerous things, then I prefer to make a list as it will help me remember everything.

The conditional 'if there would be' is incorrect; it should be 'if there is'. 'A numerous things' is incorrect; 'numerous' does not take 'a'. 'Acquired property' is incorrect in this context; 'prefer' or 'choose' is appropriate. 'Help me to remind' should be 'help me remember'.

× Oh well I don't make list for my work as there is not too much thing so I have to make a list.

✓ Oh well, I don't make a list for my work as there are not too many things that require me to make a list.

'Make list' needs an article: 'make a list'. 'Not too much thing' is incorrect; 'too many things' is correct for countable nouns. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Apart from this I have a good memory so I can easily memorize all the things as work is my routine thing so it's on my tips now.

✓ Apart from this, I have a good memory so I can easily memorize all the things as work is my routine, so it's on the tip of my tongue now.

The phrase 'on my tips' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'on the tip of my tongue'. Also, commas are needed for clarity.

× Well it depends on the person to person like under a number of people who don't want to who don't want to make a list as they have a good memory so they can easily memorize all the things.

✓ Well, it depends from person to person; some people don't want to make a list as they have a good memory and can easily memorize all the things.

The phrase 'depends on the person to person' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'depends from person to person'. The sentence is also repetitive and needs restructuring for clarity.

× Apart from this and they also they also think that making a list is a waste of time.

✓ Apart from this, they also think that making a list is a waste of time.

The phrase 'Apart from this and they also they also' is redundant and incorrect. It should be 'Apart from this, they also'.

× As we are living in a technological error so I prefer to make list on my phone so I can easily because phone is always with means.

✓ As we are living in a technological era, I prefer to make a list on my phone because the phone is always with me.

'Technological error' is incorrect; the correct word is 'era'. 'Make list' needs an article: 'make a list'. 'With means' is incorrect; it should be 'with me'.

× But if I make a list on the paper so there are more chances to make it to lossed it or sometimes I may forget it.

✓ But if I make a list on paper, there is a higher chance of losing it or sometimes I may forget it.

'On the paper' should be 'on paper' as a general medium. 'More chances to make it to lossed it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a higher chance of losing it'.