列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding pauses and repetitions. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go to the mall because it helps me avoid buying unnecessary items and saves money.

建议: Your answer is good but could be improved by linking your ideas more clearly and avoiding short, fragmented sentences. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to show cause and effect.

示例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me manage my time effectively. For example, it allows me to organise my study schedule and finish my homework early, which reduces my stress and pressure.

建议: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid fragmented sentences. Provide more specific details and use linking words to connect your points logically.

示例: I think some people dislike making lists because they prefer working in messy environments. In fact, I read a study that suggests some creative or genius people work better without lists or strict organisation.

建议: Avoid repetition and fragmented sentences. Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clear explanations.

示例: I prefer making my lists on my phone or iPad because it's quicker and more convenient. Additionally, I can personalise my lists with colours and stickers, which makes organising more enjoyable.

× And I'm planning. To go to to the mall.

✓ And I'm planning to go to the mall.

The sentence is fragmented and contains a repeated word 'to'. Combining the fragments into one sentence and removing the duplicate 'to' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't like spending my money on something that I'm. Do not need it.

✓ I don't like spending my money on something that I do not need.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here because 'something' already serves as the object. Also, the sentence was fragmented; combining it into one sentence improves flow.

× it actually helped me by organizing my study and finish my homework early.

✓ it actually helps me by organizing my study and finishing my homework early.

The sentence mixes past tense 'helped' with present tense context. Using present tense 'helps' and gerund 'finishing' maintains consistency and grammatical correctness.

× Which decreased my stress and the pressure on me.

✓ This decreases my stress and the pressure on me.

Starting a sentence with 'Which' creates a fragment. Replacing it with 'This' and adjusting the verb tense creates a complete sentence.

× there are some people like to work in a messy. Places

✓ there are some people who like to work in messy places

The phrase 'like to work in a messy places' is incorrect because 'places' is plural and should not have 'a'. Also, 'some people like' needs 'who' to connect the clause properly.

× They are. Genius people.

✓ They are genius people.

The sentence is fragmented by an unnecessary full stop. Combining into one sentence improves readability.

× That actually work in a mess and don't like to do a list.

✓ who actually work in a mess and don't like to make a list.

Using 'who' instead of 'that' is more appropriate for people. Also, 'do a list' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make a list'.

× Actually, I prefer making my list on my phone or either my phone. Or my iPad because it's easy to make it. Listed for it less time and.

✓ Actually, I prefer making my list on my phone or my iPad because it's easy to make it and takes less time.

The sentence is fragmented and contains repetition ('my phone or either my phone'). Combining fragments and removing redundancy improves clarity.

× You can design as well. You can play with the colors and stickers as much.

✓ You can design as well; you can play with the colours and stickers as much as you like.

The phrase 'as much' is incomplete; adding 'as you like' completes the comparison. Also, 'colours' is the British English spelling.