列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more concise and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you make a list, using linking words like 'because' or 'as'.

示例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because I tend to forget items. This helps me remember everything I need to buy and saves time.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas logically. Also, avoid repetition and ensure sentences are complete and clear.

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me manage my time effectively. Therefore, I can complete tasks within deadlines and avoid missing important points.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to contrast opinions. Also, avoid vague expressions and be more specific.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel restricted and stressed when they see all the tasks they have to do. However, I believe it's a personal choice whether to make a list or not.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because, being forgetful, I often lose paper lists. So, using my phone is more convenient and easier to manage.

× Well yes, I do make a list when I'm going for a shopping 'cause being a forgetful person it helps me to remind the things which I'm forgetting and needs need to buy.

✓ Well yes, I do make a list when I'm going shopping 'cause being a forgetful person it helps me to remind the things which I'm forgetting and need to buy.

The phrase 'going for a shopping' is incorrect; 'shopping' here should be used as a gerund without 'for'. The correct form is 'going shopping'. Also, 'needs need to buy' is redundant; 'need to buy' suffices.

× Well yes, I do make a list when I'm going for a shopping 'cause being a forgetful person it helps me to remind the things which I'm forgetting and needs need to buy.

✓ Well yes, I do make a list when I'm going shopping 'cause being a forgetful person it helps me to remind the things which I'm forgetting and need to buy.

The phrase 'needs need to buy' is incorrect because 'needs' is plural but used redundantly with 'need'. The correct phrase is 'need to buy' to match the plural 'things'.

× Yes I do make a list for the work as it helps me to divide my time accordingly under complete my work within the time limit as so if I do not make a list for my work or I would or surely missed some points or are missed some work.

✓ Yes, I do make a list for work as it helps me to divide my time accordingly and complete my work within the time limit. If I do not make a list for my work, I would surely miss some points or miss some work.

The original sentence is confusing and contains structural errors. 'Under complete' is incorrect; it should be 'and complete'. The phrase 'or I would or surely missed some points or are missed some work' is ungrammatical and should be corrected to 'I would surely miss some points or miss some work' for clarity and correctness.

× Some people do not like making list 'cause they feel more bound to the those less and get more stressed looking at the work they need to do.

✓ Some people do not like making lists 'cause they feel more bound to those lists and get more stressed looking at the work they need to do.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' to agree with 'some people' who make multiple lists. Also, 'the those less' is incorrect; it should be 'those lists'.

× Some people do not like making list 'cause they feel more bound to the those less and get more stressed looking at the work they need to do.

✓ Some people do not like making lists 'cause they feel more bound to those lists and get more stressed looking at the work they need to do.

The phrase 'the those less' is incorrect; 'those' is a demonstrative pronoun and should not be preceded by 'the'. The correct phrase is 'those lists'.

× But according to me it is totally fine if one wants to make a list or not.

✓ But according to me, it is totally fine whether one wants to make a list or not.

The phrase 'if one wants to make a list or not' is better expressed as 'whether one wants to make a list or not' to correctly present alternatives.

× Will I prefer to make a list on a phone 'cause again, being a forgetful person, I generally do not remember where I keep the paper where I made the list.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone 'cause again, being a forgetful person, I generally do not remember where I keep the paper where I made the list.

'Will I prefer' is incorrect here; the speaker is stating a preference, so simple present 'I prefer' is appropriate.

× Will I prefer to make a list on a phone 'cause again, being a forgetful person, I generally do not remember where I keep the paper where I made the list.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone 'cause again, being a forgetful person, I generally do not remember where I keep the paper where I made the list.

The phrase 'on a phone' is less natural than 'on my phone' when referring to one's own device.