列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Та хэлний дүрмийн алдааг засаж, илүү байгалийн, үр дүнтэй хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, 'When I go shopping for many items, I usually make a list. However, if I only need one or two things, I don't make a list.' гэж хэлж болно.

示例: When I go shopping for many items, I usually make a list. However, if I only need one or two things, I don't make a list.

建议: Хариулт нь ойлгомжгүй, үг хэллэг буруу хэрэглэгдсэн байна. Илүү тодорхой, логик холбоотой хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, 'Sometimes I make a list for my work, and it helps me stay organized. However, managing time can be difficult.' гэж хэлж болно.

示例: Sometimes I make a list for my work, and it helps me stay organized. However, managing time can be difficult.

建议: Хэлний алдааг засаж, илүү тодорхой, логик холбоотой хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, 'Some people don't like making lists because they find it hard to manage their time. However, if they learn to use lists effectively, it can improve their lifestyle.' гэж хэлж болно.

示例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it hard to manage their time. However, if they learn to use lists effectively, it can improve their lifestyle.

建议: Хариулт нь ойлгомжгүй, үг хэллэг буруу хэрэглэгдсэн байна. Илүү тодорхой, логик холбоотой хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, 'I prefer to make lists on paper because I take them more seriously than lists on my phone.' гэж хэлж болно.

示例: I prefer to make lists on paper because I take them more seriously than lists on my phone.

× When I going to shop for a lot of things.

✓ When I go shopping for a lot of things.

The verb 'going' is incorrectly used without an auxiliary verb. The correct form is 'go shopping' to express the activity. Use the base verb 'go' plus '-ing' form 'shopping' to indicate the action.

× but when I had the shop or just the one or two things I don't really make a list.

✓ but when I have to shop for just one or two things, I don't really make a list.

The phrase 'had the shop' is incorrect; it should be 'have to shop' to express necessity. Also, 'one or two things' should be preceded by 'for' to indicate the object of shopping.

× Sometimes I make a list for my work and somehow it works, but that's kind of hard for me because managing time and connecting to your teacher list for your rock is kind of risk.

✓ Sometimes I make a list for my work and somehow it works, but that's kind of hard for me because managing time and connecting to your teacher's list for your work is kind of risky.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrectly used when referring to the student's own teacher and work; it should be 'your teacher's list' if speaking to someone else, but here it seems to refer to the student's own context, so 'my teacher's list' or rephrasing is better. Also, 'rock' is likely a typo for 'work'. 'Risk' should be 'risky' as an adjective.

× I think some people can't manage their time by making lists, so there don't like to make lists bad.

✓ I think some people can't manage their time by making lists, so they don't like to make lists.

The pronoun 'there' is incorrectly used instead of 'they'. Also, 'bad' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× If they start to manage their time to connect into their lists, it will change their lifestyle.

✓ If they start to manage their time by connecting with their lists, it will change their lifestyle.

The preposition 'into' is incorrect here; 'connecting with' or 'using' is more appropriate to express the relationship with their lists.

× I prefer to make list on my phone paper because on my phone.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my phone rather than on paper because on my phone...

The noun 'list' should be plural 'lists' to match the context. Also, 'phone paper' is incorrect; it should be 'phone rather than on paper'.

× I don't really take it seriously like any other people, but on my paper and oh, my desk, the paper.

✓ I don't really take it seriously like other people do, but when it's on paper on my desk, I do.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct comparison.

× Our kid not to sit and make the list.

✓ Our kid does not sit and make the list.

The sentence lacks auxiliary verb 'does' for negative present tense and proper subject-verb agreement.