列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'whenever I go to shopping' and 'whatever things I want to buy'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain how you use your mobile app to keep the list, and why it helps you.

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go out. I usually keep it in the Notes app on my phone, which helps me remember everything I need to buy and avoid forgetting items.

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to explain how making a list helps you complete your tasks. Also, avoid repetition and keep sentences complete.

示例: Yes, I make a list of tasks every morning. This helps me organise my day, and I tick off each task as I complete it, so I stay productive and focused.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat fragmented and repetitive. Try to use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect ideas. Also, avoid repeating words and ensure sentences are complete and clear.

示例: Some people don't like making lists because they think it's a waste of time. However, I find lists very helpful since I tend to forget things easily, so I use a mobile app to keep track of my tasks.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference. Use linking words to explain why you prefer your phone over paper. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and repetition.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone using the Notes app because it's convenient and I can easily tick off tasks as I complete them throughout the day.

× Yes, whenever I go to shopping I make a list or whatever things I want to buy.

✓ Yes, whenever I go shopping I make a list of whatever things I want to buy.

The phrase 'go to shopping' is incorrect because 'go' is followed by the verb in -ing form without 'to' when referring to activities. The correct form is 'go shopping'. Also, 'or whatever things' should be 'of whatever things' to correctly link the list to the items.

× By keeping list in my notes, it helps me to remember everything whichever things I wanted to purchase.

✓ By keeping the list in my notes, it helps me to remember everything, whichever things I want to purchase.

The phrase 'keeping list in my notes' is missing the article 'the' before 'list'. Also, 'whichever things I wanted to purchase' should be 'whichever things I want to purchase' to maintain present tense and clarity.

× I keep the list in my mobile app in the notes.

✓ I keep the list in the notes section of my mobile app.

The phrase 'in my mobile app in the notes' is awkward. It is clearer to say 'in the notes section of my mobile app' to specify where the list is kept.

× While doing work are usually make a list that I don't make list while doing work.

✓ While doing work, I usually do not make a list.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure by adding the subject 'I' and proper verb forms.

× Actually in the morning. When I wake up in the morning I list out the work what I want to do in throughout my day.

✓ Actually, in the morning when I wake up, I list out the work that I want to do throughout my day.

The original sentence is fragmented and has redundant phrases. Combining the sentences and correcting 'what' to 'that' improves clarity and grammar.

× According to that I complete the work and do tick marks the completion of the work.

✓ According to that, I complete the work and tick off the completed tasks.

The phrase 'do tick marks the completion of the work' is awkward. Using 'tick off the completed tasks' is a more natural and grammatically correct expression.

× Some people don't make list because they think that it's waste of time.

✓ Some people don't make lists because they think that it's a waste of time.

'Make list' should be plural 'make lists' to match the plural subject 'some people'. Also, 'it's waste of time' requires the article 'a' before 'waste'.

× Whereas there are many people like me who usually make the list to remember things because I am.

✓ Whereas there are many people like me who usually make lists to remember things because I do.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Changing 'make the list' to 'make lists' and completing the sentence with 'because I do' clarifies the meaning.

× I forgot forgot the things very early.

✓ I forget things very easily.

The phrase 'forgot forgot the things very early' is incorrect. The correct present tense 'forget' fits better with the context, and 'very easily' is a more natural expression than 'very early'.

× So I make the list in my mobile application.

✓ So I make the list on my mobile application.

The correct preposition for using apps is 'on' rather than 'in'.

× But some people. Seems it's ridiculous task.

✓ But some people seem to think it's a ridiculous task.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a subject for 'seems'. Adding 'seem to think' and correcting the article before 'ridiculous task' improves grammar and clarity.

× I'd like to see, as I previously said, that I made the list in my phone in the mobile application called Notes where I keep all my.

✓ I'd like to say, as I previously said, that I make the list on my phone in the mobile application called Notes where I keep all my lists.

'I'd like to see' is incorrect; it should be 'I'd like to say'. Also, 'made' should be 'make' to match present tense. The sentence was incomplete and is corrected for clarity.

× List whatever things I wanted to do throughout the day.

✓ List whatever things I want to do throughout the day.

'Wanted' should be 'want' to maintain present tense consistent with the context.

× And with the completion of the task tick mark. The list.

✓ And I tick off the list as I complete each task.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct expression of the intended meaning.