列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to form complete and grammatically correct sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because I tend to forget items easily. Moreover, there are many products I need to buy, so making a list helps me shop faster and avoid missing anything.

建议: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct grammar. Begin with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Use appropriate vocabulary such as 'overlapping tasks' and 'reduce stress'.

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me complete my tasks on time and avoid overlapping duties. Also, it reduces my stress and allows me to focus better.

建议: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons using linking words like 'because'. Use correct plural forms and vocabulary.

示例: Some people do not like making lists because they have a good memory and prefer to remember things mentally.

建议: Use clear and concise sentences with correct grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'as'. Avoid unnecessary words and ensure coherence.

示例: I used to prefer making lists on paper, but with technological advances, I now prefer using my mobile phone because it is more convenient and easy to carry everywhere.

× Just I make. List while going to the shop becaused I forget easily.

✓ I just make a list while going to the shop because I forget easily.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and a spelling mistake. In English, the subject 'I' should come before the verb 'make'. Also, 'becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. Correct word order and spelling improve clarity.

× And there are many products I have to buy from the shop are so either 4 missing them I make a list to be faster.

✓ There are many products I have to buy from the shop, so to avoid missing them, I make a list to be faster.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper conjunctions and prepositions. Adding 'so to avoid missing them' clarifies the purpose of making a list. Also, '4' should be replaced with 'to' for correct meaning.

× To buy something from the shop.

✓ I make a list to buy something from the shop.

This is a sentence fragment without a subject and verb. Adding 'I make a list' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× Just I make a list for my work because it helps me to do my old tasks on time, do not overlapping the work or so to do my work in a very good way.

✓ I just make a list for my work because it helps me to do my tasks on time, avoid overlapping work, and do my work in a very good way.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and awkward phrasing. 'Just I make' should be 'I just make'. 'Do not overlapping' is incorrect; it should be 'avoid overlapping'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It also helps me to less a stressor and to focus more.

✓ It also helps me to reduce stress and to focus more.

'Less a stressor' is incorrect usage. The correct phrase is 'reduce stress'. This correction uses appropriate quantifiers and expressions.

× Some peoples did not make list while shopping because they have best ability to keep these things in their mind to be have.

✓ Some people do not make lists while shopping because they have the best ability to keep these things in their mind.

'Peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'person' is 'people'. 'Did not make list' should be 'do not make lists' to match present tense and plural form. 'To be have' is incorrect and removed for clarity.

× In the past time, I preferred to make a list only paper but with the advancement of technology, I prefer to make a list on the mobile phone which is more convenient and comfortable as compared to the place to make it on the paper.

✓ In the past, I preferred to make a list only on paper, but with the advancement of technology, I prefer to make a list on my mobile phone, which is more convenient and comfortable compared to making it on paper.

'In the past time' is better as 'In the past'. 'Only paper' needs the preposition 'on'. 'As compared to the place to make it on the paper' is awkward; rephrased for clarity. The sentence now correctly contrasts past and present preferences.

× It's easily to carry as mobile phone Sir are the things that that person can carry every time.

✓ It is easy to carry because a mobile phone is something a person can carry all the time.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary words like 'Sir'. 'Easily' should be 'easy' as an adjective. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.