列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then explain with specific reasons. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, say: "Yes, I always make a list when shopping to remember what I need and to avoid overspending."

示例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping. This helps me remember the items I need and prevents me from buying unnecessary things, which saves money.

建议: Improve clarity and grammar by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'however' to show contrast. For example, say: "Yes, I sometimes make a list for work to stay efficient. However, I don't always follow it strictly when I feel lazy."

示例: Yes, I sometimes make a list for my work to help me stay organized and finish tasks on time. However, I admit that sometimes I don't follow the list strictly when I feel a bit lazy.

建议: Make your answer more natural and complete. Start with a clear opinion and explain it with reasons. Avoid unclear phrases. For example, say: "In my opinion, some people dislike making lists because they think it's a waste of time if they don't follow them properly."

示例: In my opinion, some people don't like making lists because they feel it's useless if they don't stick to it strictly, so they prefer to work without one.

建议: Organize your answer with a clear preference and supporting reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid repetition. For example, say: "I prefer making lists on my phone because I can easily check and update them, and phones are less likely to be lost than paper."

示例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I can easily check off items and update the list regularly. Also, phones are less likely to be lost compared to paper lists.

× Yes, I do make a list when I'm shopping in the market to help myself or remember what else should I buy from you know what I was I shouldn't buy from the market and. Preventing of over spending my money.

✓ Yes, I do make a list when I'm shopping in the market to help myself remember what else I should buy and what I shouldn't buy from the market, preventing overspending my money.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Preventing of over spending' which is not a proper verb form. The correct form is 'preventing overspending' where 'preventing' is a gerund verb and 'overspending' is a noun formed from a verb. Also, the sentence structure was confusing and needed rephrasing for clarity.

× Oh yes, sometimes I do make list for my work just to improve myself to make sure that I work efficiently.

✓ Oh yes, sometimes I do make lists for my work just to improve myself and to make sure that I work efficiently.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' because the sentence implies making more than one list over time. Also, adding 'and' improves sentence flow.

× Beef and done everything that I have to I have to do before the due date.

✓ I make sure to finish everything that I have to do before the due date.

The original sentence is unclear and contains errors like 'Beef and done'. It lacks proper sentence structure. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence conveying the intended meaning.

× And sometimes it does work, but sometimes when I get over lazy I might not really follow it strictly.

✓ And sometimes it does work, but sometimes when I get too lazy, I might not really follow it strictly.

The phrase 'get over lazy' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'get too lazy' to indicate excessive laziness. This is a modal verb usage issue related to expressing degree.

× In my personal opinions on my thing.

✓ In my personal opinion.

The phrase 'opinions on my thing' is incorrect and unnecessary. The correct phrase is 'in my personal opinion' which is a standard expression to state personal views.

× Making a list it's a waste of time if they don't follow it strictly.

✓ Making a list is a waste of time if they don't follow it strictly.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it's' after 'Making a list' causing a sentence structure error. The correct form is 'Making a list is...' to properly link subject and verb.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone if I have to if it's necessary.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone if I have to and if it's necessary.

The original sentence lacks conjunction 'and' to connect the two conditional clauses properly, which is a preposition/conjunction usage issue.

× Since I can check it off and openly and regularly if it's on my phone instead of a paper, and paper can be easily lost compared to phone.

✓ Since I can check it off openly and regularly if it's on my phone instead of on paper, and paper can be easily lost compared to a phone.

The adverb 'openly' is misplaced and unnecessary here; 'check it off' is sufficient. Also, 'on a paper' should be 'on paper' and 'compared to phone' should be 'compared to a phone' for correct article usage.

× I'm writing making a list on my phone. Make myself more productive than paper.

✓ Making a list on my phone makes me more productive than using paper.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper structure. Combining them into one sentence with correct subject-verb agreement improves clarity and grammar.