列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid redundancy and improve clarity. For example, "shout" should be "shop". Also, avoid repeating similar phrases like "at the time or at the moment." Use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details.

示例: I don't usually make a list when I shop because I find it easier to buy things spontaneously based on what I need at the moment.

建议: Avoid repetition such as "start to start" and be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "Therefore, I write a To Do List to organize my tasks before starting work."

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work because I find it difficult to begin without one. Therefore, I write a To Do List to organize my tasks before starting work.

建议: Be more specific and avoid vague phrases like "stuff like that." Also, improve sentence structure and coherence by using linking words. For example, "Some people may dislike making lists because conditions like ADHD or OCD make it challenging to organize tasks."

示例: Some people may dislike making lists because conditions like ADHD or OCD make it challenging to organize tasks effectively.

建议: Avoid starting sentences with "Like" in formal speaking. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more concise. For example, "I prefer paper because seeing the list on my desk helps me remember my tasks better."

示例: I prefer making lists on paper because seeing the list on my desk helps me remember my tasks better.

× I prefer going there and just buy whatever I think I need at the time or at the moment.

✓ I prefer going there and just buying whatever I think I need at the time or at the moment.

After the verb 'prefer', when expressing preference for actions, the verb should be in the '-ing' form if followed by another verb. Here, 'buy' should be 'buying' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb form.

× Well for work I really need to do a list because I find it hard to start to start working without a list.

✓ Well, for work I really need to make a list because I find it hard to start working without a list.

The phrase 'do a list' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'make a list'. Also, the phrase 'start to start working' is repetitive; it should be 'start working'. The preposition 'for' is correct here.

× So whenever I want to start working I should or I have to write down what I have to do or my To Do List so that I can start working.

✓ So whenever I want to start working, I should or have to write down what I have to do on my To Do List so that I can start working.

The modal verb 'should' and phrase 'have to' are both used correctly, but the sentence is a bit awkward. Adding a comma after 'working' improves clarity. Also, 'or' between 'should' and 'have to' is acceptable but could be clearer if rephrased. Additionally, 'on my To Do List' is more appropriate than 'or my To Do List'.

× It depends on each person's and their personality.

✓ It depends on each person's personality.

The phrase 'each person's and their personality' is redundant and incorrect. 'Each person's personality' is sufficient and grammatically correct. Mixing singular possessive 'person's' with plural pronoun 'their' causes inconsistency.

× so this thing make it makes it hard for them to start doing lists or stuff like that.

✓ so this thing makes it hard for them to start doing lists or stuff like that.

The subject 'this thing' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. The original sentence mistakenly includes both 'make' and 'makes', which is incorrect.