列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but avoid unnecessary or unclear words like 'Ascension'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 4-5 sentences for better coherence.

示例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because I tend to forget things easily. Therefore, I prioritize the most important items at the top and put less important ones towards the end. This method helps me stay organized and ensures I don't miss anything.

建议: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, using correct grammar and vocabulary. Also, avoid irrelevant information and focus on the question asked.

示例: I am a student, so I don't have a job. However, I do make lists for my study materials and important topics I need to learn. This helps me stay organized and manage my time effectively.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but lacks fluency and contains repetition. Use linking words and complete sentences to make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: I think some people don't like making lists because they have hectic schedules. As a result, they don't have enough time to prepare and follow a list.

建议: Your answer is relevant and clear but can be improved by using linking words and avoiding informal expressions like '24 by 7'. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary for better impact.

示例: I usually prefer to make a list on my phone because it is always with me. Therefore, I am less likely to forget it compared to paper lists, which can be easily misplaced. Moreover, using my phone is convenient and easy to manage.

× As I am a student so I usually don't work but yes I make list of master the material whenever I go to shopping and also on powder important topics that I have to learn about.

✓ As I am a student, I usually don't work, but yes, I make a list to master the material whenever I go shopping and also on important topics that I have to learn about.

The original sentence has redundant conjunctions and awkward phrasing. 'As I am a student so' is incorrect; 'As I am a student' or 'Since I am a student' is sufficient. 'Make list of master the material' is unclear and ungrammatical; it should be 'make a list to master the material'. 'Go to shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'go shopping'. 'Powder important topics' seems to be a mishearing or typo; corrected to 'important topics'. Proper commas are added for clarity.

× And now these people have a hectic schedule. That's why they didn't have a time to make a list and then follow it up.

✓ Now these people have a hectic schedule. That's why they don't have time to make a list and then follow it up.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Now' indicates present time, so 'didn't have' should be 'don't have' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'a time' is incorrect; 'time' is uncountable here and should be used without 'a'.

× So that's why I don't work and I make a list for my study material.

✓ So that's why I don't work, and I make a list of my study material.

'Make a list for' is less common and slightly incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'make a list of' when referring to the items included in the list.

× I usually prefer to make a list on my phone because my phone is with me 24 by 7 and I might forget about the paper but no one forget about their phone so that's why I make it on my phone which is easy to handle.

✓ I usually prefer to make a list on my phone because my phone is with me 24/7, and I might forget the paper, but no one forgets their phone, so that's why I make it on my phone, which is easy to handle.

The phrase 'forget about the paper' is better as 'forget the paper' in this context. Also, 'no one forget about their phone' should be 'no one forgets their phone' to agree with the third person singular subject. Added commas for clarity and corrected '24 by 7' to '24/7' which is the standard expression.