列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and clarify your points with linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reason with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: No, I usually don't make a list when I shop because I prefer to wander around and see what catches my eye. Therefore, my shopping trips are often spontaneous rather than planned.

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors and keep sentences concise.

示例: Yes, I often use a To Do List app on my phone to organise my daily tasks. This method works well because it helps me prioritise activities and manage my time efficiently.

建议: Improve sentence structure and clarity by avoiding fragmented sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific reasons or examples.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it complicated or consider it a hassle. Others prefer to manage their time mentally, believing they don't need to write things down.

建议: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and use linking words to improve flow. Also, avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone using To Do List apps because they are convenient and can send notifications to remind me of important deadlines and tasks.

× I will like to accidentially want wander around the shops.

✓ I would like to accidentally wander around the shops.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrectly used here to express a preference or desire. The correct modal verb is 'would' to indicate a polite or hypothetical desire. Also, 'want' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. Additionally, 'accidentially' is a spelling error and should be 'accidentally'.

× my shopping doesn't really have a destination or some target.

✓ my shopping doesn't really have a destination or a target.

The phrase 'some target' is incorrect because 'target' is a countable noun and should be preceded by an article 'a' when singular. Using 'some' is inappropriate here.

× And actually, I think it works because it helped me prioritize and manage my time.

✓ And actually, I think it works because it helps me prioritize and manage my time.

The verb 'helped' is in the past tense, which conflicts with the present tense 'works' and 'think'. The correct verb tense here is present tense 'helps' to maintain consistency.

× Well, I actually think that. This could be complicated for some people, they just don't have to have it or they consider it as a hassle.

✓ Well, I actually think that this could be complicated for some people; they just don't have it or consider it a hassle.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary words. 'Don't have to have it' is incorrect; it should be 'don't have it'. Also, 'consider it as a hassle' should be 'consider it a hassle'. The two independent clauses should be properly connected with a semicolon or conjunction.

× And in contrast, for some people, they think they can manage their time or do their prioritization just in their mind.

✓ And in contrast, some people think they can manage their time or do their prioritization just in their minds.

The phrase 'just in their mind' is incorrect because 'mind' should be plural 'minds' when referring to multiple people. Also, 'for some people, they think' is redundant; 'some people think' is sufficient.

× Well personally I would like to make a list on my phone using the mobile apps to To Do List apps on my mobile phone which I found pretty convenient as it can often send notifications and alerts are specific times to remind me of some important deadlines as well as some specific that task that I would have to do.

✓ Well, personally, I would like to make a list on my phone using the To Do List app, which I find pretty convenient as it can often send notifications and alerts at specific times to remind me of important deadlines as well as specific tasks that I have to do.

The sentence is overly long and contains redundancy and incorrect pronoun usage. 'Mobile apps to To Do List apps' is confusing and redundant; it should be 'using the To Do List app'. 'I found' should be present tense 'I find' to match the context. 'Alerts are specific times' should be 'alerts at specific times'. 'Some specific that task' is incorrect; it should be 'specific tasks'. Also, 'that I would have to do' is better as 'that I have to do' to indicate current obligations.