唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct verb tenses; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Also avoid repetition (e.g., confidence mentioned twice) and correct small grammar errors ("used to sing" -> "sing").

示例: No, I don't really like singing in public because I lack confidence. However, when I'm alone in my room, I sometimes sing for fun because I feel comfortable and can relax without worrying about being judged.

建议: Use correct tense and reduce redundancy. Begin with a direct statement, then give one clear specific detail about what you learned, using a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I learned some singing techniques in high school. For example, our music teacher held weekly Saturday classes where she taught us about vocal techniques such as breath control and pitch variation.

建议: Make the response shorter and fix grammar. State the person first, then give one clear reason and an example. Avoid repeating the same idea (fear of judgement / lack of confidence).

示例: I would like to sing for my mother because she is very supportive and won't judge me. For example, I would choose a well-known song about a mother's love and sing it to show my appreciation.

建议: Clarify meaning and avoid invented or unclear words. Provide a concise opinion and a specific reason, using a linking word. Correct redundancy and awkward phrasing.

示例: Yes, I think singing can make many people happy because it allows them to express emotions and relieve stress. For instance, singing in a choir often boosts mood and creates a sense of belonging.

建议: Start with a direct statement and give one clear, specific supporting detail with a linking word. Consider correcting phrasing ("listening to others sing"), and avoid overgeneralisation.

示例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because songs often convey strong emotions. For example, a heartfelt performance can make me feel empathy and lift my spirits.

建议: Use correct tense and pronouns, and be specific. Give one clear fact about when and what you learned, linked smoothly. Avoid filler words like "uh" and awkward phrases like "vocal languages."

示例: Yes, I took singing lessons in eighth grade with my sister. Our teacher taught us basic vocal exercises, breath control, and how to adjust tone for different styles of songs.

× To be honest, no, I don't like singing because I don't have much confidence that I can sing in front of others.

✓ To be honest, no, I don't like singing because I don't have much confidence in singing in front of others.

The phrase 'confidence that I can sing' is awkward; native usage prefers 'confidence in' + noun or gerund. Change to 'confidence in singing in front of others' for natural present tense expression and correct prepositional use (Grammar problem type ID 6 and 11).

× But when I am alone in my room, I used to sing because that time no one is around me.

✓ But when I am alone in my room, I sing because no one is around me.

Mixes present 'am' with 'used to' which indicates past habit. Since speaker describes a present habit when alone, use simple present 'I sing'. Also 'that time' is unnecessary; use 'no one is around me' (Grammar problem type ID 6 and 5).

× Yes, I still remembered that I have learnt about how to sing when I was in my high school education.

✓ Yes, I still remember that I learned how to sing when I was in high school.

Time reference 'still remembered' conflicts with present remembering; use present 'remember'. Use simple past 'learned' for the past event 'when I was in high school'. Also 'high school education' is wordy—use 'high school'. (Grammar problem type ID 5 and 6).

× There was music classes on every Saturday where our music teacher taught us about different types of sounds that we can use in singing.

✓ There were music classes every Saturday where our music teacher taught us about different types of sounds we could use in singing.

Subject-verb agreement: 'classes' is plural, so use 'were' (Grammar problem type ID 1/27). Use 'every Saturday' (no 'on') and past tense 'could' or 'we could' to match past context. Removed unnecessary 'that'. (Grammar problem types ID 27, 11).

× I want to sing for my mother if I ever got chance because she's the one who will not judge me because I have fear of judgement and I have lack of confidence so I will sing for her.

✓ I want to sing for my mother if I ever get the chance because she does not judge me; I am afraid of being judged and lack confidence, so I would sing for her.

Mixes tenses and modals: 'if I ever got chance' should be conditional present 'if I ever get the chance' or 'if I ever got the chance' with consistent conditional. Use 'does not judge me' for habitual truth. 'I have fear of judgement' is unidiomatic—use 'I am afraid of being judged' and 'lack confidence' without article. Also prefer 'would sing' for tentative conditional. (Grammar problem type ID 4 and 12/13).

× There was a famous song about mother's love, I will sing that for her.

✓ There is a famous song about a mother's love; I will sing it for her.

Use present 'there is' for an existing song. 'Mother's love' needs an article 'a mother's love' and 'that' as object is better as 'it'. Also split into two clauses with semicolon or period. (Grammar problem types ID 22 and 6).

× Yes, for some people, singing can bring happiness to people because they love to sing, because their voices are very, very idioscious.

✓ Yes, for some people, singing can bring them happiness because they love to sing and their voices are very pleasant.

Repeated 'people' is redundant; use 'them'. 'Idioscious' is not an English word—likely intended 'delicious' or 'melodious/pleasant'. 'Melodious' or 'pleasant' fits singing. Combine clauses to avoid repetition. (Grammar problem type ID 13 and 26).

× Yes, I am fond of listening to other singing because people usually express their emotions in their songs and it boosts their confidence level when they sing in front of others.

✓ Yes, I am fond of listening to others sing because people usually express their emotions in their songs, and it boosts their confidence when they sing in front of others.

Use 'others sing' (object + bare infinitive) or 'other people's singing'. 'Other singing' is incorrect. 'Confidence level' can be simplified to 'confidence'. Added comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. (Grammar problem types ID 8 and 13).

× Yes, I have taken a singing class when I was in my high school education.

✓ Yes, I took a singing class when I was in high school.

Do not mix present perfect 'have taken' with a specific past time 'when I was in high school'; use simple past 'took'. Also simplify 'in my high school education' to 'in high school'. (Grammar problem type ID 5 and 12).

× Uh I still remember that when I was in my 8th grade, my sister and me had taken music classes from our music teacher where she teach us about different vocal languages that how we can sing a song.

✓ I still remember that when I was in 8th grade, my sister and I took music classes from our music teacher where she taught us about different vocal techniques and how we can sing a song.

Use subject pronoun 'my sister and I' not 'me'. Use simple past 'took' and 'taught' for past events rather than past perfect 'had taken'. 'Vocal languages' is incorrect—use 'vocal techniques' or 'vocal styles'. Remove 'that' before 'how'. (Grammar problem types ID 12, 5, 13).