唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify and correct grammar, avoid irrelevant words, and combine ideas into a concise 2–3 sentence response. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Watch verb forms and articles.

示例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and express myself. For example, when I was young my friends and I often went to karaoke, and even now I sing for fun at gatherings.

建议: Use correct tense and word choice, make the reason concise and coherent. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid awkward phrases like “discovered” and overlong clauses.

示例: No, I haven't had the chance to learn formally because my parents discouraged extracurricular activities that might distract me from my studies. As a result, I focused on academics since I hope to become a doctor.

建议: Remove unrelated words (e.g., “clothes”), correct grammar, and make sentences coherent with linking words. State the main idea then give one brief specific context (where/why).

示例: I prefer to sing for my family and close friends because I feel comfortable and supported by them. For example, I often sing at small gatherings or in karaoke rooms where the relaxed atmosphere encourages me.

建议: Fix vocabulary mistakes and explain the idea simply and accurately. Use linking words to connect reason and result, and use correct scientific terms in a simple way.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because it releases brain chemicals such as dopamine and endorphins. Therefore, singing can reduce stress and quickly improve people's mood.

建议: Be concise and correct verb forms and collocations. Start with a topic sentence, then give one clear example using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “seeing their favorite song.”

示例: Yes, I enjoy listening to friends and family sing because it shows how happy they are even if they are not professionals. For example, last week my mother sang at a small gathering and everyone applauded her enthusiastically.

建议: Give a direct answer, correct grammar, and provide a concise reason with a linking word. Use correct noun forms and reduce redundancy.

示例: No, I haven't had the chance to take a singing class because I was very busy with subjects like maths and science when I was young. Even now my schedule is quite tight, so I don't have time to practise formally.

× Yes, I love singing eyes. Always enjoy it.

✓ Yes, I love singing. I always enjoy it.

The word 'eyes' is incorrect and seems to be a typo or wrong word choice; 'always' should be paired with a subject and verb. Replace 'singing eyes' with 'singing' and add 'I' before 'always' to form a complete sentence.

× When I was young my friend and I often went to karaoke and even now I sing for fun because it's relax and help me express myself.

✓ When I was young, my friend and I often went to karaoke, and even now I sing for fun because it's relaxing and helps me express myself.

'Relax' should be the adjective/gerund 'relaxing' (verb + -ing) to describe 'it'. 'Help' needs third person singular agreement 'helps' because the subject 'it' is singular. Also add commas for clarity.

× I haven't had a chance to learn how to sing properly because my parents discovered any activity that might distract me from the studies.

✓ I haven't had a chance to learn how to sing properly because my parents discouraged any activity that might distract me from my studies.

The verb 'discovered' is incorrect in context; 'discouraged' conveys preventing participation. 'Any' with 'discouraged' is acceptable but 'my studies' requires possessive. The tense 'haven't had' is correct to indicate up to now.

× They want me focused on school and I hope I would become a doctor, so I concentrate on academic.

✓ They want me to be focused on school, and I hope I will become a doctor, so I concentrate on academics.

Missing 'to be' after 'want me' and 'focused'. 'I hope I would become' should use future 'will' for a future intention. 'Academic' should be plural noun 'academics' to mean subjects.

× Well, I would like to sing for my family and clothes and my close friends because I feel comfortable and support by them.

✓ Well, I would like to sing for my family and close friends because I feel comfortable and supported by them.

'Clothes' is an incorrect word here and likely a typo; remove it. 'Support' should be past participle 'supported' after 'feel' to form the correct participial adjective.

× They usually encourage me to perform, so I enjoy singing at small gathering or even in karaoke room.

✓ They usually encourage me to perform, so I enjoy singing at small gatherings or even in a karaoke room.

Countable nouns 'gathering' and 'karaoke room' need plural or an article. Use 'small gatherings' or 'a small gathering' and 'a karaoke room'.

× Yes, I believe thinking can bring happiness to many people because it lilies brain chemical like dopamine or endorphin that this chemical can help reduce our stress and leave the mood immediately.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to many people because it releases brain chemicals like dopamine and endorphins; these chemicals can help reduce our stress and lift our mood immediately.

'Thinking' seems wrong in context; 'singing' fits the topic. 'Lilies' is incorrect; use 'releases'. 'Brain chemical' should be plural 'brain chemicals' and 'endorphin' pluralized to 'endorphins'. Sentence structure improved: use 'these chemicals' and 'lift our mood' instead of 'leave the mood'.

× Yes I do, I enjoy listening to my friends or my family seeing their favorite song because it show how happy they are even if they are not professional singers.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy listening to my friends or family sing their favorite songs because it shows how happy they are even if they are not professional singers.

Run-on sentence needs splitting. 'Seeing' should be 'sing' to express action. 'Song' should be plural 'songs' or match subject. 'Show' needs third person singular agreement 'shows'.

× For example, last week my mother sang at a small gathering event and everyone share up her.

✓ For example, last week my mother sang at a small gathering, and everyone cheered her on.

'Share up her' is not English; intended meaning is 'cheered her on'. Use 'cheered her on' to express encouragement. Add comma and correct collocation.

× No, I haven't the chance to take singing class because when I was young I was really busy with subject on like math or science.

✓ No, I haven't had the chance to take a singing class because when I was young I was really busy with subjects like math and science.

'Haven't the chance' should be 'haven't had the chance'. 'Singing class' needs an article 'a'. 'Subject on like' is incorrect: use 'subjects like' and 'math or science' should be 'math and science'.

× Even now I grow up my schedule very tight, I don't have any time to focus on.

✓ Even now that I've grown up my schedule is very tight; I don't have any time to focus on singing.

'I grow up' is wrong for present state; use 'I've grown up' or 'having grown up'. Missing 'is' in 'my schedule is very tight'. Add object 'singing' after 'focus on' to complete the sentence.