唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'when you singing' and 'express my ideas through seeing' which should be 'when you sing' and 'express my ideas through singing'. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and coherent by linking ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me focus and refresh my mind. It is a soothing activity that recharges my energy. I remember my mother teaching me to express my feelings through singing when I was a child.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'I attend' instead of 'I attended', and 'participate the classes' instead of 'participate in the classes'. Avoid filler words like 'you know' and ensure verb tenses are consistent. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

示例: Yes, I attended extracurricular singing lessons when I was in primary school. I really enjoyed participating in the classes and spending quality time with my classmates while singing. Those moments were truly unforgettable.

建议: There are several errors in your answer, such as 'seeing' instead of 'singing', and unclear phrases like 'higher starting pressure'. Try to use precise vocabulary and avoid repetition. Also, explain your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

示例: I like to sing for my daughter because singing helps children develop creativity and relax. It is especially beneficial when they experience stress from school or other pressures.

建议: Your answer conveys the main idea but contains hesitations and some awkward phrasing like 'a mixture feeling' and repeated fillers. Try to speak more fluently and use varied vocabulary. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

示例: Absolutely. Singing helps people feel both focused and relaxed at the same time. Moreover, expressing emotions through songs brings joy and a sense of calm, making it a truly soothing experience.

× I think when you singing you feel focused on something and you can refresh your mind, recharge your batteries and uh, it's really a soothing moment.

✓ I think when you sing you feel focused on something and you can refresh your mind, recharge your batteries and uh, it's really a soothing moment.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used after 'when you'. The correct form is the base verb 'sing' because 'when' introduces a time clause that requires the simple present tense here.

× I still remember the when I was a child, my mother taught me to express my ideas through seeing.

✓ I still remember when I was a child, my mother taught me to express my ideas through singing.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly placed before 'when'. Also, 'seeing' is a typo or incorrect word; it should be 'singing' to match the context.

× Yes, I attend some extracurricular lessons.

✓ Yes, I attended some extracurricular lessons.

The action happened in the past, so the past tense 'attended' should be used instead of the present tense 'attend'.

× I really enjoyed to, you know, participate the classes and, you know, spend high quality time with my classmates when we are seeing when we were singing.

✓ I really enjoyed, you know, participating in the classes and, you know, spending high quality time with my classmates when we were singing.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by the gerund form 'participating' not the infinitive 'to participate'. Also, 'participate' requires the preposition 'in' before 'the classes'. The phrase 'when we are seeing' is incorrect and should be removed or corrected to 'when we were singing'.

× I like to sing for my daughter because I really think seeing is a good technique for kids to, you know, shape their creativity and relax.

✓ I like to sing for my daughter because I really think singing is a good technique for kids to, you know, shape their creativity and relax.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; it should be 'singing' to match the context and meaning.

× It's a relaxed, it's a relaxing for kids when they face the higher starting pressure.

✓ It's relaxing for kids when they face higher starting pressure.

The phrase 'It's a relaxed' is incorrect because 'relaxed' is an adjective describing a state, not a noun. 'It's relaxing' correctly uses the adjective to describe the experience. Also, 'the higher starting pressure' should be 'higher starting pressure' without 'the'.

× When you sing, you feel focused and relaxed. It's a mixture feeling.

✓ When you sing, you feel focused and relaxed. It's a mixed feeling.

The phrase 'a mixture feeling' is incorrect; the correct form is 'a mixed feeling' where 'mixed' is an adjective describing the noun 'feeling'.

× And I think when you can express your feelings through singing songs, it really, uh, bring, uh, in, bring joy and uh, you know, relaxation for you.

✓ And I think when you can express your feelings through singing songs, it really, uh, brings joy and, uh, you know, relaxation for you.

The verb 'bring' should be in the third person singular present tense 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.