唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and clear by limiting it to 3-4 sentences. For example, say "I like singing because I had a melodious voice as a child, and people appreciated it, which motivated me to sing more."

示例: Yes, I like singing because I had a melodious voice as a child, and people appreciated it. This encouragement motivated me to keep singing and enjoy it even now.

建议: Use correct verb forms and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, "I have not formally learnt singing, but I get inspired by artists like Yo-Yo Honey Singh and Justin Bieber, who help me improve my singing."

示例: I have not formally learnt how to sing, but I get inspired by artists like Yo-Yo Honey Singh and Justin Bieber. Their music motivates me and helps me improve my singing techniques.

建议: Avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "I want to sing for my mother on her birthday as a gift because she motivates me to sing."

示例: I want to sing for my mother on her birthday as a special gift. She has always motivated me to sing, so this would be a meaningful gesture.

建议: Focus on grammar and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words. For example, "Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because songs emotionally connect with people, motivating and uplifting them."

示例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because songs emotionally connect with people. They can motivate and uplift listeners, making them feel joyful.

× Actually, yes, I do like singing because when I was a child I have a melodious voice which everyone likes and appreciate me, so I got motivated each and every time when I sync.

✓ Actually, yes, I do like singing because when I was a child I had a melodious voice which everyone liked and appreciated me, so I got motivated each and every time when I sang.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I have' should be 'I had' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child'. Similarly, 'everyone likes and appreciate me' should be 'everyone liked and appreciated me' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Sync' should be 'sang' as the past tense of 'sing'. Maintaining consistent tense is important for clarity.

× Actually, I do not really learn how to sing but I usually uh get inspired from my adult artist, for example yo-yo Honey Singh or Justin Bieber as they are my motivation and they really help me to correct my singing phrases.

✓ Actually, I have not really learned how to sing but I usually get inspired by my adult artists, for example Yo-Yo Honey Singh or Justin Bieber as they are my motivation and they really help me to correct my singing phrases.

The phrase 'do not really learn' is incorrect for past experience; 'have not really learned' is appropriate to express past experience up to now. Also, 'get inspired from' should be 'get inspired by' as the correct preposition is 'by' after 'inspired'. 'Adult artist' should be plural 'adult artists' to match the context. Proper nouns like 'Yo-Yo Honey Singh' should be capitalized.

× Actually, I do not really learn how to sing but I usually uh get inspired from my adult artist, for example yo-yo Honey Singh or Justin Bieber as they are my motivation and they really help me to correct my singing phrases.

✓ Actually, I have not really learned how to sing but I usually get inspired by my adult artists, for example Yo-Yo Honey Singh or Justin Bieber as they are my motivation and they really help me to correct my singing phrases.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect after 'get inspired'; the correct preposition is 'by'. This is a common collocation in English. Also, 'learn' should be in present perfect 'have learned' to indicate experience.

× Actually, I do not really learn how to sing but I usually uh get inspired from my adult artist, for example yo-yo Honey Singh or Justin Bieber as they are my motivation and they really help me to correct my singing phrases.

✓ Actually, I have not really learned how to sing but I usually get inspired by my adult artists, for example Yo-Yo Honey Singh or Justin Bieber as they are my motivation and they really help me to correct my singing phrases.

The phrase 'my adult artist' should be plural 'my adult artists' because more than one artist is mentioned. Using plural form is necessary to match the context.

× Actually, I really love to sing for my mother as her birthday is coming and I really want to sing a happy birthday song for my mother as a form of gift and a good gesture because she's the one who motivates me when I do sing.

✓ Actually, I really love to sing for my mother as her birthday is coming and I really want to sing a happy birthday song for her as a form of gift and a good gesture because she's the one who motivates me when I sing.

The phrase 'when I do sing' is awkward; 'when I sing' is more natural. Also, 'for my mother' repeated can be replaced with 'for her' to avoid redundancy. The sentence is otherwise correct in tense.

× Yes, I do think singing bring happiness to the people as the songs are really emotionally connect to the people's heart. Uh, from where they get emotional or get motivated.

✓ Yes, I do think singing brings happiness to people as the songs are really emotionally connected to people's hearts, from where they get emotional or get motivated.

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing' (third person singular). 'Connect' should be 'connected' to form the correct past participle in passive voice. 'The people' can be simplified to 'people' for naturalness. 'People's heart' should be plural 'people's hearts' to match plural 'people'.