唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors, such as 'seeing' instead of 'singing' and 'medias' instead of 'media'. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I like singing because it allows me to express my inner feelings that I might not show to others. Moreover, singing helps me relax and connect with people during social events.

建议: Your answer is somewhat disorganized and contains grammatical mistakes, such as 'things' instead of 'thing', 'sing lessons' instead of 'singing lessons', and incomplete sentences. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I have taken singing lessons with a teacher. Although I quit halfway and didn't learn much, the experience was valuable because I learned some songs and improved my confidence.

建议: Your answer has some unclear phrases like 'I seem to myself' and fragmented sentences such as 'Karaokes.' Try to use complete sentences and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

示例: It depends on the situation. Usually, I sing to myself for enjoyment and relaxation. However, I also sing for others during special occasions like birthdays or parties, especially at karaoke sessions.

建议: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making your points clearer. For example, say 'singing' instead of 'thing' and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, definitely. I have read that singing can trigger the release of endorphins, which make people feel happier. Even though I am not an expert, I find that singing helps me relieve stress and improve my mood.

× Yes I do. Seeing not only it is a way to express your inner self, another part of yourself that you might not be able to show to other medias, but also through seeing you can actually relax and unwind and connect with a lot of people.

✓ Yes I do. Singing is not only a way to express your inner self, another part of yourself that you might not be able to show to other media, but also through singing you can actually relax and unwind and connect with a lot of people.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Seeing' instead of 'Singing'. The verb 'sing' should be in the -ing form 'singing' to function as a gerund (noun) here. Also, 'medias' is incorrect plural; the correct plural is 'media'. The sentence structure is improved by starting with 'Singing is not only...'.

× Yes I do. Seeing not only it is a way to express your inner self, another part of yourself that you might not be able to show to other medias, but also through seeing you can actually relax and unwind and connect with a lot of people.

✓ Yes I do. Singing is not only a way to express your inner self, another part of yourself that you might not be able to show to other media, but also through singing you can actually relax and unwind and connect with a lot of people.

The word 'medias' is incorrect because 'media' is already the plural form of 'medium'. Using 'medias' is a singular/plural issue. The correct plural form is 'media'.

× Yes, with a teacher I feel like it is a pretty conventional things for kids nowadays to do they take sing lessons.

✓ Yes, with a teacher I feel like it is a pretty conventional thing for kids nowadays to do; they take singing lessons.

The phrase 'a pretty conventional things' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'things'. It should be singular 'thing' to agree with 'a'. Also, 'sing lessons' should be 'singing lessons' to use the gerund form correctly.

× Yes, with a teacher I feel like it is a pretty conventional things for kids nowadays to do they take sing lessons.

✓ Yes, with a teacher I feel like it is a pretty conventional thing for kids nowadays to do; they take singing lessons.

The verb 'sing' should be in the -ing form 'singing' when used as a noun in 'singing lessons'. This is a common usage to describe the type of lessons.

× Although I don't really gain a lot of stuff from it because I quit midway, I feel like the experience was pretty valuable as it I really learned some songs that I.

✓ Although I didn't really gain a lot from it because I quit midway, I feel like the experience was pretty valuable as I really learned some songs.

The sentence has several issues: 'don't really gain' should be past tense 'didn't really gain' to match 'quit midway'. 'A lot of stuff' is informal; 'a lot' suffices. The phrase 'as it I really learned some songs that I' is incomplete and confusing; it is corrected to 'as I really learned some songs.' The sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Although I don't really gain a lot of stuff from it because I quit midway, I feel like the experience was pretty valuable as it I really learned some songs that I.

✓ Although I didn't really gain a lot from it because I quit midway, I feel like the experience was pretty valuable as I really learned some songs.

The phrase 'as it I really learned some songs that I' misuses pronouns and is incomplete. Removing 'it' and the trailing 'that I' corrects the pronoun misuse and completes the thought.

× Normally I seem to myself and for my own enjoyment and relaxation, but on different occasions I sing for other people as well, for example during their birthdays or parties.

✓ Normally I sing to myself and for my own enjoyment and relaxation, but on different occasions I sing for other people as well, for example during their birthdays or parties.

The phrase 'I seem to myself' is incorrect; it should be 'I sing to myself'. This is a pronoun and verb usage error.

× Karaokes. Yeah, I say it really depends on the situation.

✓ Karaoke. Yeah, I say it really depends on the situation.

'Karaokes' is incorrect plural; 'karaoke' is uncountable and does not take an 's'. Also, the sentence fragment 'Karaokes.' is corrected to 'Karaoke.' to fit the context. The phrase 'I say it really depends' is acceptable but could be smoother as 'I think it really depends'.

× Karaokes. Yeah, I say it really depends on the situation.

✓ Karaoke. Yeah, I say it really depends on the situation.

'Karaokes' is incorrect because 'karaoke' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. The correct form is 'karaoke'.

× I think there's some research showing that thing actually triggers your endorphins, but I'm not really knowledgeable on that aspect.

✓ I think there's some research showing that singing actually triggers your endorphins, but I'm not really knowledgeable on that aspect.

The word 'thing' is vague and singular; it should be replaced with 'singing' to clearly refer to the subject. This corrects the singular/plural and clarity issue.

× I think there's some research showing that thing actually triggers your endorphins, but I'm not really knowledgeable on that aspect.

✓ I think there's some research showing that singing actually triggers your endorphins, but I'm not really knowledgeable about that aspect.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'knowledgeable'. The correct preposition is 'about'.

× However, I think because I feel stressed or sad and it usually just helps me a lot with my mood.

✓ However, I think when I feel stressed or sad, singing usually helps me a lot with my mood.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding 'when I feel stressed or sad' clarifies the condition, and specifying 'singing' as the subject of 'helps' completes the sentence structure.