唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "when I singing" nên là "when I sing" và "feel much more better" nên là "feel much better". Ngoài ra, bạn nên tránh dùng các cụm từ không chính xác như "boost my battery" mà có thể dùng "recharge my energy". Hãy cố gắng sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. When I sing, I feel much better and it recharges my energy after a long day.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý cách dùng giới từ và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "watch on and listen to music throughout some videos" nên là "watch and listen to music through some videos". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và lặp lại, bạn nên nói ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn và dùng từ phù hợp.

示例: Honestly, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually learn by watching videos online and practicing singing along with the singers.

建议: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng đại từ không chính xác, ví dụ "she's really immersed themselves" nên là "she's really immersed herself". Ngoài ra, câu hơi dài và lặp lại, bạn nên chia câu và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu mạch lạc hơn.

示例: As an introvert, I prefer singing alone. However, if I had the chance to sing for someone, I would choose my mother because she loves music and is a great singer herself.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều/số ít, ví dụ "one of the most notable way" nên là "one of the most notable ways". Ngoài ra, câu cuối "because, you know, singing" không rõ nghĩa và không cần thiết. Hãy cố gắng dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ.

示例: Yes, definitely. Singing allows me to express my emotions through lyrics and melodies. I believe it is an effective way to share feelings and bring happiness to others.

× You know, when I singing, I can feel much more better and let my hair down.

✓ You know, when I am singing, I can feel much better and let my hair down.

The verb 'singing' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'much more better' is incorrect; 'much better' is the correct comparative form.

× I just watch on and listen to music throughout some videos on the Internet and practice my vocals by singing a song like a singer in the Internet.

✓ I just watch and listen to music through some videos on the Internet and practice my vocals by singing a song like a singer on the Internet.

The preposition 'on' after 'watch' is unnecessary and incorrect here. 'Through' is the correct preposition to indicate the medium. Also, 'in the Internet' should be 'on the Internet' because 'on' is used for platforms or surfaces.

× she's really immersed themselves in music.

✓ she's really immersed herself in music.

The reflexive pronoun must agree with the subject 'she', so 'herself' is correct instead of 'themselves' which is plural.

× So I can I think I will sing for her.

✓ So I think I will sing for her.

The phrase 'I can I think' is redundant and incorrect. Removing 'I can' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× So I think singing is one of the most notable way and effective way to convey my emotions as well as bring happiness to people because, you know, singing.

✓ So I think singing is one of the most notable and effective ways to convey my emotions as well as bring happiness to people because, you know, singing.

When listing multiple adjectives before a plural noun, the noun should be plural ('ways'), and the adjectives should be connected properly ('notable and effective').