唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“Once singing I feel very happy”应改为“When I sing, I feel very happy”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

示例: Yes, I like singing very much. When I sing, I feel happy because it helps me relax and forget the stress of the day. Singing is a great way for me to relieve pressure and enjoy myself.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，如“haven't take”应为“haven't taken”，表达不清晰且用词不当，如“keeps me feel high climb and heavy”不符合语境。建议使用简单明了的句子，准确表达意思。

示例: No, I haven't taken any singing classes before. However, I enjoy singing by myself at home when I am relaxing. I also watch videos of singers I like and try to imitate their sounds.

建议: 回答中语法和用词错误较多，如“paid a lot to my family”应为“have done a lot for my family”，“thanks for them”应为“thank them”。建议简化句子，使用正确的表达方式，突出感恩的主题。

示例: I want to sing for my parents because they have done a lot for our family and worked hard. Singing for them is my way to show appreciation and thank them.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“more happier”应为“happier”，“yelled out to express my suggestion”表达不清晰。建议使用简单句，明确表达观点，避免重复。

示例: Of course. Singing makes me feel happier and more relaxed. I enjoy singing with my friends because it helps me express my feelings and brings joy.

× Once singing I feel very happy because it helped me relax and forget about the the stress fall in a day.

✓ Once singing, I feel very happy because it helps me relax and forget about the stress that falls in a day.

句中“Once singing”缺少逗号，且“helped”时态不一致，应使用一般现在时“helps”，因为描述的是习惯性动作；“the the”重复，应删除一个“the”；“stress fall”应为“stress that falls”，需要使用关系代词和动词第三人称单数形式。

× Once singing I feel very happy because it helped me relax and forget about the the stress fall in a day.

✓ Once singing, I feel very happy because it helps me relax and forget about the stress that falls in a day.

句中“helped”使用了过去时，但描述的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“helps”。

× No, I haven't take any since classes before.

✓ No, I haven't taken any singing classes before.

“take”应使用过去分词“taken”与助动词“haven't”搭配；“since classes”应为“singing classes”，原词拼写错误。

× No, I haven't take any since classes before.

✓ No, I haven't taken any singing classes before.

“take”应为过去分词“taken”，因为与助动词“have”连用构成完成时态。

× However, I enjoy singing by myself at home when I am relaxing because it keeps me feel high climb and heavy.

✓ However, I enjoy singing by myself at home when I am relaxing because it keeps me feeling happy and light.

“keeps me feel”应为“keeps me feeling”，动词“keep”后应接动名词形式；“high climb and heavy”表达不当，应改为“happy and light”更符合语境。

× I also follow the videos that I like and I try to imitate the sounds I hear.

✓ I also follow the videos that I like and try to imitate the sounds I hear.

句中“and I try”中“and”连接两个动作，主语重复，去掉第二个“I”更自然。

× I want to sing for my parents because they paid a lot to my family and they worked hard to praise my family so I really want to thanks for them.

✓ I want to sing for my parents because they have done a lot for my family and they worked hard to support us, so I really want to thank them.

“paid a lot to my family”表达不准确，应为“have done a lot for my family”；“praise my family”用词错误，应为“support us”；“thanks for them”应为“thank them”，动词形式错误。

× So I maybe prefer to sing for my parents to express my appreciation.

✓ So I may prefer to sing for my parents to express my appreciation.

“maybe”是副词，不能直接修饰动词“prefer”，应使用情态动词“may”表示可能性。

× Of course, why singing? I just feel more happier and more relaxing than before, and I would like to sing with my friends and yelled out to express my suggestion so that it makes me more happier than before, so I think it can bring happiness.

✓ Of course, why singing? I just feel happier and more relaxed than before, and I would like to sing with my friends and yell out to express my feelings so that it makes me happier than before, so I think it can bring happiness.

“more happier”重复比较级，应为“happier”；“more relaxing”应为“more relaxed”形容人的感受；“yelled out”时态不对，应为“yell out”；“suggestion”用词不当，应为“feelings”。