唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural and detailed, but you could improve coherence by using more linking words and correcting minor grammar errors, such as 'help' to 'helps'. Also, try to avoid slight redundancy by combining similar ideas more smoothly.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions creatively. I've been singing since childhood, and it always helps me feel relaxed and refreshed, especially after a stressful day. For instance, when I'm overwhelmed, singing my favourite songs helps me calm down and lift my mood.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases (e.g., 'Sydney has been one of my longest hobby', 'improve my world significantly', 'perform as my friend'). To improve, focus on clear, direct sentences, correct grammar, and specific details relevant to singing lessons.

示例: Yes, I have. Singing has been one of my longest hobbies, and I have trained professionally. When I was in grades 5 and 6, I really enjoyed the lessons because they helped me develop various vocal techniques and improve my voice significantly. Singing has become one of my strengths, especially when I perform for my friends, which makes me proud.

建议: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but you can improve fluency by using better linking words and correcting minor grammar issues (e.g., 'bring' to 'brings'). Also, avoid listing with numbers in speech; use words instead.

示例: I would love to sing for two groups of people: first, my friends, and second, my family. Although I'm quite shy when singing or speaking in public, I really enjoy performing for others because it brings them happiness. Therefore, singing for my friends and family during gatherings is my top choice since it feels more comfortable and meaningful.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors (e.g., 'lyrics is high'). To improve, focus on clearer sentence structure, correct grammar, and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'make a lot of feelings'.

示例: Definitely, music is a universal way for people around the world to express happiness, and singing can evoke many emotions, including joy. Especially when the lyrics are uplifting and the rhythm is light, singing can boost people's mood. For me, singing is my favourite way to relieve stress after a difficult day.

× For example, when I'm feeling overwhelmed, singing my favorite songs help me calm down and lift my mood.

✓ For example, when I'm feeling overwhelmed, singing my favorite songs helps me calm down and lift my mood.

The subject 'singing my favorite songs' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' to agree in number. Using 'help' is incorrect because it is plural form.

× Yes I have, Sydney has been one of my longest hobby and I train professionally.

✓ Yes I have, singing has been one of my longest hobbies and I train professionally.

The word 'Sydney' is likely a typo for 'singing'. 'Hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because it is preceded by 'one of my longest', which requires a plural noun.

× Sometimes singing becomes my strong point, especially when I perform as my friend and I'm kinda proud about that.

✓ Sometimes singing becomes my strong point, especially when I perform with my friend and I'm kinda proud of that.

The preposition 'as' is incorrect here; 'with' is appropriate to indicate performing together. Also, 'proud about' should be 'proud of' as the correct collocation.

× I'm thinking of two groups of people when I would love to sing.

✓ I'm thinking of two groups of people for whom I would love to sing.

The phrase 'when I would love to sing' is incorrect; it should be 'for whom I would love to sing' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× Personally, I'm quite shy, especially when it comes to singing or speaking in public. However, I really enjoy performing for others and bring them happiness.

✓ Personally, I'm quite shy, especially when it comes to singing or speaking in public. However, I really enjoy performing for others and bringing them happiness.

The verb 'bring' should be in the gerund form 'bringing' to parallel 'performing' and maintain correct sentence structure.

× Definitely, music is such a ubiquitous thing in different parts of the world to express their happiness, and singing itself can make a lot of feelings and emotions as well as happiness, especially when the lyrics is high and the rhythm is light.

✓ Definitely, music is such a ubiquitous thing in different parts of the world to express happiness, and singing itself can evoke many feelings and emotions as well as happiness, especially when the lyrics are high and the rhythm is light.

The phrase 'express their happiness' is incorrect because 'their' is unclear; 'express happiness' is more general. 'Make a lot of feelings' is unnatural; 'evoke many feelings' is better. 'Lyrics' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'.