唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and natural, but it could be more concise and avoid redundancy. Try to directly state your interest and then briefly explain why you prefer not to sing publicly, keeping it within 3-4 sentences. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas like "not very soothing" and "not very clear" which convey the same meaning.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. However, my voice isn't very clear, so I prefer singing alone, like in the bathroom, where I feel comfortable.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' which affect fluency. Also, the sentence structure is a bit awkward. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid fillers to sound more confident and natural.

示例: No, I haven't formally learned how to sing. Although I'm interested, family expectations and my personal goals have kept me from taking singing lessons so far.

建议: Your answer is heartfelt and relevant, but some phrases are slightly awkward, such as 'in every thick and thin time' and 'a good daughter of her.' Try to use more natural expressions and link your ideas smoothly to improve coherence.

示例: If I had the chance, I would love to sing for my mother because she has always supported me through difficult times. I deeply respect her and want to show my gratitude through singing.

建议: Your answer conveys the main idea but is somewhat fragmented and incomplete, especially the last sentence. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'a great feeling of' without finishing the thought.

示例: Absolutely. Singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. When the audience connects with a song, it creates a shared joyful experience.

× Instead I am a bathroom singer.

✓ Instead, I am a bathroom singer.

A comma is needed after 'Instead' to separate the introductory adverb from the main clause, improving sentence clarity and flow.

× Not really umm I have interest in learning singing but due to some reasons UH and family pressure, I want to achieve other goals in my life and I did not learn any uh learning session or singing session in my life.

✓ Not really. Umm, I have an interest in learning singing but due to some reasons, uh, and family pressure, I want to achieve other goals in my life and I have not attended any learning session or singing session in my life.

The sentence lacked proper punctuation and article usage. 'I have interest' should be 'I have an interest' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'did not learn any learning session' is incorrect; it should be 'have not attended any learning session' to correctly express the experience in present perfect tense.

× I always try to be a good daughter of her and always respect her from my heart.

✓ I always try to be a good daughter to her and always respect her from my heart.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'to' when expressing a relationship like 'daughter to her'.

× When a person is singing and the audience relate that song to oneself or own self or with their loving ones.

✓ When a person is singing and the audience relate that song to themselves or their loved ones.

The pronouns 'oneself' and 'own self' are incorrect in this context. The correct reflexive pronoun for plural 'audience' is 'themselves'. Also, 'with their loving ones' is better expressed as 'their loved ones' for natural English usage.

× Through singing we can express our emotions to others and I think it's a great feeling of.

✓ Through singing, we can express our emotions to others, and I think it's a great feeling.

The sentence is incomplete and awkwardly structured. Adding a comma after 'singing' improves readability, and removing 'of' at the end completes the sentence properly.