唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应避免重复和语法错误，表达更自然流畅。例如，“express me, express my feelings”应改为“express my feelings”。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because I have a pleasant voice. Whenever I listen to music I like, I can memorize and sing it. Moreover, singing helps me relax and express my feelings.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，如“learn learn myself”和“in in my”。建议使用正确的时态和表达，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: No, I haven't learned to sing professionally. However, I often listen to music online and teach myself to sing in my own way.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“present at present”和“dream is to dream is to”。建议简洁表达，避免重复，并用连接词连接句子，使表达更自然。

示例: At present, I usually sing for my friends and family, who always encourage me and applaud. However, my dream is to sing in front of a large audience someday.

建议: 回答中有多处语法错误和不完整的句子，如“singing the male in in when we sing the melody”。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免语法错误，并用连接词使句子连贯。

示例: Of course, singing can bring happiness because the melody and lyrics express emotions that people can easily understand and relate to.

× And singing makes me relaxed and express me, express my feelings.

✓ And singing makes me relaxed and express my feelings.

这里的“express me”是不正确的表达，应该用“express my feelings”来表达“表达我的感情”。“express”后面需要接宾语，这里宾语是“my feelings”。

× No, actually I didn't.

✓ No, actually I haven't.

这里回答是否学过唱歌，应该用现在完成时态“haven't”表示到目前为止没有学过，而不是过去时“didn't”。

× I haven't learned about seeing professionally, but I usually listen to some music on the Internet and I could learn learn myself.

✓ I haven't learned about singing professionally, but I usually listen to some music on the Internet and I could learn by myself.

“seeing”应为“singing”，因为谈论的是唱歌。并且“learn learn myself”重复且缺少介词，正确表达是“learn by myself”。

× I usually learn myself to singing in in my in my own way.

✓ I usually teach myself to sing in my own way.

“learn myself to singing”结构错误，应该是“teach myself to sing”，即“教自己唱歌”。

× Well, present at present, I usually sing for my friends and my parents, my families, and they always encourage me to say more and applause for me.

✓ Well, at present, I usually sing for my friends and my parents, my family, and they always encourage me to sing more and applaud for me.

“present at present”重复，应去掉一个“present”。“families”应为单数“family”，表示家庭。动词“say”应为“sing”，因为是唱歌。名词“applause”应改为动词“applaud”。

× However, my dream is to dream is to sing in front of many people, and they could sing.

✓ However, my dream is to sing in front of many people, and they could listen.

“dream is to dream is to”重复，应去掉重复部分。句子后半部分“and they could sing”不合逻辑，应该是“they could listen”，表示别人听自己唱歌。

× Of course, seeing can bring happiness to people because singing the male in in when we sing the melody and also the lyrics express the express some something that other people can easily get and.

✓ Of course, singing can bring happiness to people because when we sing the melody and also the lyrics express something that other people can easily understand.

“seeing”应为“singing”。“singing the male in in”语法错误，应为“when we sing the melody”。“express the express some something”重复且混乱，应简化为“express something”。“get”用词不当，改为“understand”更合适。