唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your feelings about singing and supporting it with clear reasons. Avoid repeating words and ensure correct sentence structure.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me feel relaxed and happy. Music brings positive emotions and calms me down when I am stressed.

建议: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, with many grammatical mistakes and repetitions. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Also, complete your thoughts to make the answer coherent.

示例: Yes, I started learning to sing when I was in secondary school because I had to prepare for a music exam. Later, I took lessons from a professional singer, but I didn't enjoy that style of singing.

建议: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, using linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repetition and ensure your sentences are complete and natural.

示例: Firstly, I like to sing for myself because it helps me relax and enjoy the moment. Additionally, I enjoy singing for my family as it brings us closer together.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific examples using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and ensure your ideas are fully expressed.

示例: Yes, singing beautiful songs can definitely bring happiness and positive emotions to people. However, sometimes loud or noisy music, like metro music, can be disturbing and unpleasant.

× Yes, I like singing because when I'm singing it can't let me feel so good.

✓ Yes, I like singing because when I sing, it makes me feel so good.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'can't let me feel' which is ungrammatical. The verb 'make' is more appropriate to express causing a feeling. Also, 'when I'm singing' is better as 'when I sing' for general statements.

× And it can.

✓ And it can.

This sentence fragment 'And it can.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be connected to a complete idea or removed for clarity.

× And music can bring a good emotion emotion to me and it will can let me feel relaxed and calm down and feel pleasure.

✓ And music can bring good emotions to me and it can let me feel relaxed, calm, and pleased.

The phrase 'a good emotion emotion' is redundant and incorrect; 'good emotions' is better. 'Will can' is incorrect modal verb usage; only one modal verb should be used. Also, 'calm down' is a phrasal verb meaning to become calm, but here 'calm' as an adjective fits better.

× Yes, I was start start to learn how to sing when I was in our scenery school because I have to pack the exam with the music.

✓ Yes, I started to learn how to sing when I was in our secondary school because I had to pass the exam with music.

The phrase 'was start start' is incorrect; the past tense 'started' is correct. 'Scenery school' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'secondary school'. 'Have to pack the exam' is incorrect; 'had to pass the exam' is appropriate past tense and meaning.

× Then I start to sing with a professional professional so but I don't like singing that style because.

✓ Then I started to sing with a professional, but I don't like singing in that style because...

Repetition of 'professional' is an error. 'Start' should be past tense 'started' to match the timeline. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for grammar.

× Actually, the first of all, I want to think for myself because I enjoy to sing for my by myself.

✓ Actually, first of all, I want to sing for myself because I enjoy singing by myself.

'Think for myself' is incorrect in this context; 'sing for myself' is intended. 'Enjoy to sing' should be 'enjoy singing'. 'For my by myself' is incorrect; 'by myself' suffices.

× It was a a good way to let me feel calm down and let me feel pleasure.

✓ It is a good way to help me feel calm and to feel pleasure.

'Was a a' has repetition and tense inconsistency; present tense 'is' fits better. 'Feel calm down' is incorrect; 'feel calm' is correct. 'Feel pleasure' is acceptable but 'to feel pleasure' is clearer.

× And I also want to speak for us. I also want to sing to my family.

✓ And I also want to sing for others. I also want to sing to my family.

'Speak for us' is likely a misuse; 'sing for others' or 'sing for people' fits better. The second sentence is correct.

× Yes sing a beautiful song or definitely can bring the good emotion or good feels to people and but if sometimes like the metro music it will so noisy and will be made the people feel so.

✓ Yes, singing a beautiful song can definitely bring good emotions or feelings to people, but sometimes, like with metro music, it can be so noisy and make people feel uncomfortable.

The original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'Sing a beautiful song or definitely can bring' is incorrect; 'singing a beautiful song can definitely bring' is correct. 'Good emotion or good feels' should be 'good emotions or feelings'. 'Will be made the people feel so' is incorrect; 'make people feel uncomfortable' is appropriate.