唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'despite I am not singing very well' nên sửa thành 'although I am not very good at singing'. Bạn nên chia câu thành các câu ngắn hơn và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và rõ ràng hơn.

示例: I really like singing, although I am not very good at it. Singing helps me release my emotions and relax after school. Sometimes, I sing while I am in the bath or in my bedroom.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Ví dụ, 'I have learned how to sing the Korean song' nên sửa thành 'I learned to sing Korean songs'. Ngoài ra, tránh dùng từ 'ridiculous' nếu không phù hợp với ngữ cảnh. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: To be honest, I learned to sing when I was a kid. I really liked a Korean music band, so I learned to sing their songs. Looking back, it feels a bit funny to remember how I practiced.

建议: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng. Ví dụ, 'especially my parents is the person that I am prefer the most' nên sửa thành 'especially my parents, who I prefer the most'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

示例: I want to sing for my family because it is very meaningful. Especially, I want to sing for my parents, who mean the most to me.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý tránh lặp từ như 'because because' và sử dụng số nhiều đúng cách như 'lyrics' thay vì 'lyric'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên mạch lạc hơn bằng cách sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để nối ý.

示例: Absolutely, singing can bring happiness to people because of its rhymes and meaningful lyrics. However, sometimes sad songs do not bring happiness but instead evoke sadness.

× I really like singing despite I am not singing very well, but singing helped me to release my emotions and relax after school and I sometime singing while I am in bath or in my bedroom.

✓ I really like singing despite not singing very well, but singing helps me to release my emotions and relax after school and I sometimes sing while I am in the bath or in my bedroom.

The phrase 'despite I am not singing' is incorrect; 'despite' should be followed by a noun, pronoun, or gerund, so 'despite not singing' is correct. 'Singing helped' should be 'singing helps' to maintain present tense consistency. 'I sometime singing' is incorrect; it should be 'I sometimes sing' because 'sometimes' is an adverb modifying the verb 'sing'. Also, 'in bath' should be 'in the bath' because 'bath' is a singular countable noun requiring an article.

× Hmm, to be honest, I have learned how to sing when I was a kid.

✓ Hmm, to be honest, I learned how to sing when I was a kid.

The present perfect tense 'have learned' is not appropriate with the specific past time 'when I was a kid'. The simple past tense 'learned' should be used to indicate a completed action in the past.

× There is a music band that I really like but they are in Korean language so I have learned how to sing the Korean song and this is very ridiculous when I memorize back.

✓ There is a music band that I really like, but they sing in Korean, so I learned how to sing Korean songs, and it sounds very ridiculous when I remember it.

'They are in Korean language' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'they sing in Korean'. 'I have learned' should be 'I learned' to match past tense. 'The Korean song' should be plural 'Korean songs' if referring generally. 'This is very ridiculous when I memorize back' is awkward; 'it sounds very ridiculous when I remember it' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I want to sing for family because this is very meaningful and of course in the life family, especially my parents is the person that I am prefer the most.

✓ I want to sing for my family because it is very meaningful, and of course in life, family is important; especially my parents are the people I prefer the most.

'For family' should be 'for my family' to specify possession. 'This is very meaningful' should be 'it is very meaningful' referring to singing for family. 'In the life family' is incorrect; 'in life, family is important' is better. 'My parents is the person' is wrong; 'my parents are the people' is correct subject-verb agreement and plural form. 'I am prefer' is incorrect; 'I prefer' is correct.

× Absolutely, yes, singing can bring happiness to people because because of it rhymes and the meaningful lyric.

✓ Absolutely, yes, singing can bring happiness to people because of its rhymes and meaningful lyrics.

The phrase 'because because of' is redundant; only 'because of' is needed. 'The meaningful lyric' should be plural 'meaningful lyrics' to match 'rhymes'. Also, 'its' is the correct possessive pronoun referring to singing.

× But sometimes in the sad song it cannot bring the happiness instead of bringing the sadness to people.

✓ But sometimes, sad songs cannot bring happiness; instead, they bring sadness to people.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'In the sad song' should be 'sad songs'. 'It cannot bring the happiness' should be 'cannot bring happiness'. 'Instead of bringing the sadness' should be 'instead, they bring sadness'. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct.