唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，且有重复和不连贯的问题。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达“potential”，并用更自然的表达方式说明害羞的原因。

示例: I don't like singing because I feel shy when I sing in front of strangers, and I don't think I have a good voice.

建议: 回答不完整，句子结构混乱，缺少清晰的主题句和具体细节。建议用完整句子表达学习经历，并说明感受。

示例: I learned to sing only during primary school. I remember our music teacher asked us to sing songs about Jesus, which made me feel peaceful.

建议: 句子结构较长且不够流畅，缺少连接词。建议分句表达，使用连接词使表达更连贯，并具体说明原因。

示例: I want to sing for my family because singing religious songs can bring peace and happiness to them.

建议: 回答含糊且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议用简单明了的句子表达观点，并给出具体原因。

示例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy because music helps them relax and enjoy themselves.

× Actually I don't like singing because singing need to have the potential and I don't have the potential.

✓ Actually I don't like singing because singing needs to have the potential and I don't have the potential.

这里的主语是单数名词"singing"，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式"needs"，而不是复数形式"need"。

× Also I think singing to the strangers makes me feel shy so that I don't really like.

✓ Also I think singing to strangers makes me feel shy so I don't really like it.

"to the strangers"中的定冠词"the"不合适，应该去掉，直接用"to strangers"。此外，句尾缺少宾语，需加"it"。

× I have only learned singing during primary school.

✓ I only learned singing during primary school.

"have learned"是现在完成时，表示动作与现在有关，但这里描述的是过去的经历，使用一般过去时"learned"更合适。

× I remember that at that time when the music lesson teacher will told us to sing the song to remember Jesus.

✓ I remember that at that time the music lesson teacher told us to sing a song to remember Jesus.

"will told"时态错误，应为过去时"told"。"when"在此句中多余，应去掉。"the song"改为"a song"更自然。

× It makes me feel.

✓ It made me feel happy.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，需补充完整表达感受。

× I will want to sing for my family because I think if I sing this song that's related to Jesus will let the people around me also think peaceful and more happy.

✓ I want to sing for my family because I think if I sing this song that's related to Jesus, it will make the people around me feel peaceful and happier.

"will want"不合适，直接用一般现在时"want"表达意愿。句子缺少主语"it"，且"think peaceful and more happy"表达不自然，应改为"feel peaceful and happier"。

× Yes, I definitely think can bring happy to people because the reforms will make people to be relaxing and more happier and the fives can.

✓ Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because it will make people feel relaxed and happier.

缺少主语"singing"，"bring happy"应为"bring happiness"。"make people to be relaxing"错误，正确为"make people feel relaxed"。"more happier"重复比较级，应为"happier"。句尾"and the fives can"无意义，应删除。