唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng hơn về lý do bạn thích hát và tránh sử dụng từ không chính xác như "realize stress" (nên là "release stress"). Hơn nữa, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc mạch lạc với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết tốt.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and release stress. Moreover, singing can strengthen family bonds when we sing together during gatherings.

建议: Bạn nên chia câu thành các câu ngắn hơn để tránh bị rối và sử dụng từ ngữ chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và hoàn chỉnh ý tưởng, tránh để câu bị dang dở như câu cuối cùng.

示例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was young during my school singing lessons. I especially enjoyed learning traditional Vietnamese folk songs because they helped me understand my culture better. Sometimes, I also practice singing at home to improve my skills.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý sử dụng từ chính xác hơn, ví dụ "convenient" không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này, nên dùng "confident" hoặc "relaxed". Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và chú ý chia động từ cho đúng số ít hoặc số nhiều.

示例: I want to sing for my family because they always encourage and support me. When I sing in front of them, I feel comfortable and confident, which helps me improve my skills. Their positive feedback motivates me to keep practicing and enjoy singing even more.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng chính xác. Hãy giải thích rõ ràng tại sao hát có thể mang lại niềm vui cho mọi người và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, karaoke is a popular activity that helps people relieve stress and connect emotionally with others, which makes them feel joyful.

× How umm, besides it's can, it's can uh, connected the relationships about family.

✓ Besides, it can connect relationships within the family.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and auxiliary verbs, making it unclear. 'It's can' is incorrect; 'it can' is correct. Also, 'connected' should be 'connect' to match the modal verb 'can'. The phrase 'connected the relationships about family' is awkward; 'connect relationships within the family' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing when I was young in my school singing lesson I learned about traditional Vietnamese folk song which I really enjoy because they have me understand my culture better

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was young in my school singing lessons. I learned about traditional Vietnamese folk songs, which I really enjoy because they helped me understand my culture better.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('have learned') with past time reference ('when I was young'), which is incorrect. Simple past 'learned' should be used. Also, 'singing lesson' should be plural 'singing lessons' if referring to multiple sessions. 'Folk song' should be plural 'folk songs' to match 'traditional Vietnamese'. 'They have me understand' is incorrect; 'they helped me understand' is correct past tense usage.

× Sometimes I also practice singing at home to improve my.

✓ Sometimes I also practice singing at home to improve my skills.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'my' without an object. It needs a noun to complete the meaning, such as 'skills'. This is a sentence structure error due to incomplete sentence.

× When I sing in front of them, I feel comfortable and convenient, which help me improve my skill beside them.

✓ When I sing in front of them, I feel comfortable and confident, which helps me improve my skills beside them.

'Convenient' is incorrectly used to describe a feeling; 'confident' is appropriate. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'which'. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' to be natural in this context.

× Positive feedback motivate me to keep practicing and enjoy singing even more.

✓ Positive feedback motivates me to keep practicing and enjoy singing even more.

'Motivate' should be 'motivates' to agree with singular subject 'feedback'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue rather than preposition, but the correction is necessary here.

× Well seeing camping more joy for those everyone.

✓ Well, singing brings more joy to everyone.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Seeing camping' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'singing brings'. 'More joy for those everyone' is incorrect; 'to everyone' is the correct prepositional phrase. The sentence structure is incorrect and needs rephrasing.

× Karaoke is a popular activity to realize stress harm decide that singing can impress the emotions between the people.

✓ Karaoke is a popular activity to relieve stress. I believe that singing can express emotions between people.

'Realize stress harm decide' is nonsensical; likely intended 'relieve stress'. 'Impress the emotions between the people' is incorrect; 'express emotions between people' is correct. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity.