唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用连词使表达更连贯。

示例: Yes, I like singing because it is my favorite hobby. When I feel stressed, I usually go to karaoke and sing by myself. I also want to make friends with people who enjoy singing, but it is quite difficult.

建议: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确时态，简洁表达学习经历，并具体说明喜欢的歌曲或歌手。

示例: Yes, I have learned to sing when I was young in a local class. The teacher mainly taught us how to read songs, which is important in China. I also enjoy listening to my favorite songs and writing down the lyrics.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用正确的时态和完整句子，清楚表达对祖母的感情和唱歌的意义。

示例: I want to sing for my grandma, but she passed away five years ago. When I was young, I enjoyed sharing songs with her, even though she couldn't speak Mandarin or understand music well.

建议: 回答中有词汇错误和表达不够准确。建议注意词汇拼写，使用连词使句子更流畅，并具体说明唱歌带来的情感体验。

示例: Singing can bring happiness and many other emotions, such as sadness or embarrassment. People should try to enjoy these feelings because they can give strength in life.

× Yes, I like singing and singing it's my my best hobby and and when I feel stressed I like go to the karaoke for singing and but I just sing by myself and I want to make friends with people who like singing too but I it's very hard and I feel.

✓ Yes, I like singing and singing is my best hobby. When I feel stressed, I like going to karaoke to sing, but I just sing by myself. I want to make friends with people who like singing too, but it's very hard and I feel lonely.

句中“like go to the karaoke for singing”中，“like”后应接动名词形式，故应改为“like going to karaoke to sing”。此外，句子结构混乱，需拆分成多个句子以表达清晰。

× Yes, I have learned to sing, but when I was young I have a municipal classes but teacher just teach us read songs you know is very important in China.

✓ Yes, I have learned to sing, but when I was young I had municipal classes, but the teacher just taught us to read songs. You know, it is very important in China.

句中“have a municipal classes”时态错误，应为过去时“had”。“teacher just teach us”应为过去时“taught”。此外，“read songs”应加不定式“to read songs”。

× But I like see my favorite songs and write downs of Eric's lyrics.

✓ But I like to see my favorite songs and write down Eric's lyrics.

“like see”应为“like to see”，动词后需加不定式。 “write downs of Eric's lyrics”表达不正确，应为“write down Eric's lyrics”，意为抄写歌词。

× I want to sing to my grandma, but he has to die five years ago.

✓ I want to sing to my grandma, but she died five years ago.

“he”指代奶奶错误，应为“she”。“has to die”时态和表达错误，应为过去时“died”。

× And when I was young, I will. I like showing, I like sharing, singing with my grandma, though that she can't say mandarins and music.

✓ And when I was young, I liked singing. I liked sharing singing with my grandma, though she couldn't speak Mandarin or sing well.

“I will”时态错误，描述过去应使用过去时“liked”。“can't say mandarins and music”表达不清，应为“couldn't speak Mandarin or sing well”。

× Seeing cannot just bring happiness.

✓ Singing cannot just bring happiness.

“Seeing”应为“Singing”，原句拼写错误导致词义错误。

× When you sing, you can feel different emotions of like happy, sad, embarrassed and another.

✓ When you sing, you can feel different emotions like happiness, sadness, embarrassment, and others.

“emotions of like happy”表达不正确，应为“emotions like happiness”。“another”应为复数“others”以匹配前文。

× People should try to enjoy the different emotions and bring their strength in their life.

✓ People should try to enjoy the different emotions and gain strength in their lives.

“bring their strength in their life”表达不自然，应改为“gain strength in their lives”。“life”应为复数“lives”指代不同人的生活。