唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, try to use correct sentence structures and clearer expressions. For example, say "I like singing very much because music is my passion and hobby. It relaxes my mind and brings me peace, which is why I enjoy singing." Also, avoid unnecessary words like "smart" here, which is unclear.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because music is my passion and hobby. It helps me relax and brings peace to my mind, so I love to sing whenever I can.

建议: Your answer attempts to explain your learning experience but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. To improve, use simpler and correct sentences, and organise your ideas logically. For example, say "I have not taken formal singing classes, but I learned from my mother, who is a musician. She taught me how to sing and explained the different parts of music."

示例: I haven't attended singing classes, but my mother, who is a musician, taught me how to sing and understand music when I was young.

建议: Your answer is quite unclear and has many grammatical errors. To improve, try to express your ideas clearly and use correct grammar. For example, say "I like to sing for everyone, but especially for my husband to express my love. Sometimes, I sing sad songs when I want to show my feelings during difficult times."

示例: I enjoy singing for everyone, but especially for my husband to express my love. Sometimes, I sing sad songs to share my feelings when things are not going well.

建议: Your answer conveys the idea but has many grammatical mistakes and awkward expressions. To improve, use simpler and correct sentences with linking words. For example, say "Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because music relaxes our minds and makes us feel peaceful. When we enjoy music, it improves our mood and makes us feel good."

示例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because music relaxes the mind and creates a peaceful feeling. When people listen to music, they often feel happier and more positive.

× I like Singh so much because music is my passion and my hobby.

✓ I like singing so much because music is my passion and my hobby.

The word 'Singh' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'singing' which is a gerund acting as a noun. This is a spelling error affecting the meaning of the sentence.

× The music gives relaxing to my mind, that gives me peaceful and I love it.

✓ The music gives relaxation to my mind, which makes me feel peaceful and I love it.

'Gives relaxing' is incorrect; the noun form 'relaxation' should be used. Also, 'that gives me peaceful' is incomplete; it should be 'which makes me feel peaceful' to correctly express the idea.

× That's why I sing smart.

✓ That's why I sing well.

The adverb 'smart' is incorrectly used here; the correct adverb to describe singing ability is 'well'.

× Actually not for going to the class, but yes, in the past I learned it by from my mother.

✓ Actually, I did not go to a class, but yes, in the past I learned it from my mother.

The phrase 'not for going to the class' is incorrect; it should be 'I did not go to a class'. Also, 'learned it by from my mother' is incorrect; 'learned it from my mother' is correct.

× My mother is one of the musician and she teaches me how to sing, what is the music, the parts of music and how to the verbs to sings and all things.

✓ My mother is one of the musicians and she teaches me how to sing, what music is, the parts of music, and how to use verbs to sing and all things.

'Musician' should be plural 'musicians' because it refers to one among many. Also, the sentence has other grammatical errors corrected for clarity.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I like to sing for everyone but for favoritely and sometimes I sing for my husband to sharing my love express and what the situation is occur.

✓ I like to sing for everyone but especially for my favorite people, and sometimes I sing for my husband to share my love and express what the situation is.

'Favoritely' is not a word; 'especially for my favorite people' is correct. 'To sharing' should be 'to share'. The phrase 'what the situation is occur' is incorrect; it should be 'express what the situation is'.

× If the things is occur of bad, I would like to sing like a sorry song or sad song sometime.

✓ If bad things occur, I would like to sing a sorry or sad song sometimes.

'The things is occur of bad' is incorrect; correct form is 'If bad things occur'. Also, 'like a sorry song or sad song sometime' is corrected to 'a sorry or sad song sometimes' for proper article and adverb usage.

× I believe that the singing can bring a happiness because it's gives us some type of musics and musics gives relaxing to mind and that's peaceful to our mind.

✓ I believe that singing can bring happiness because it gives us some types of music, and music gives relaxation to the mind, which is peaceful to our mind.

'The singing' should be 'singing' without 'the'. 'A happiness' is incorrect; 'happiness' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'Musics' is incorrect plural; 'music' is uncountable. 'Gives relaxing' should be 'gives relaxation'. Also, 'to mind' should be 'to the mind'.

× We got enjoy to hear it and our mind is going good.

✓ We enjoy hearing it and our mind feels good.

'We got enjoy to hear it' is incorrect; correct form is 'We enjoy hearing it'. 'Our mind is going good' is incorrect; 'our mind feels good' is appropriate.

× That's why I think that peoples can good feels.

✓ That's why I think that people can feel good.

'Peoples' is incorrect plural; 'people' is the correct plural noun. 'Can good feels' is incorrect; correct form is 'can feel good'.