唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Tu respuesta es clara pero puede mejorar en naturalidad y estructura. Evita redundancias como "I think that my voice is a bit unclear and slight sharp" y usa vocabulario más preciso. Además, divide la respuesta en oraciones más cortas para mayor claridad.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions. However, I usually avoid singing in public because I feel my voice is a bit unclear and slightly sharp.

建议: La respuesta es un poco confusa y repetitiva. Usa conectores para mejorar la coherencia y evita frases como "I already mentioned". Además, mejora la gramática y la precisión en la expresión.

示例: When I was in 11th grade, music was a compulsory subject. I tried singing then, but I wasn't very successful because my voice wasn't very clear.

建议: La respuesta es un poco larga y repetitiva. Usa oraciones más cortas y claras, y corrige errores gramaticales como "it help" a "it helps". Además, usa conectores para mejorar la fluidez.

示例: Honestly, I don't like singing much. But if I had the chance, I would sing for my mother because it helps me express my love for her.

建议: Buena respuesta con ejemplos, pero mejora la gramática y el uso de conectores. Por ejemplo, usa "it helps to express emotions" y "which boosts confidence". También evita frases redundantes como "that time".

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps express emotions. For example, when someone feels stressed, they can listen to or sing a song, which boosts their confidence and reduces stress.

× Yes, I like singing because it helps to express our emotion, but I avoid singing in the public because I think that my voice is a bit unclear and slight sharp.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it helps to express my emotions, but I avoid singing in public because I think that my voice is a bit unclear and slightly sharp.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to their own emotions, so 'my' should be used. Also, 'in the public' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in public'. Additionally, 'slight sharp' should be 'slightly sharp' to use the correct adverb form.

× Well, when I was in 11th grade in my school, music subject was compulsory for every student.

✓ Well, when I was in 11th grade at my school, the music subject was compulsory for every student.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to being at a school. Also, 'music subject' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific subject.

× That time I tried to sing a song but I failed because I already mentioned that my voice is not too much clear.

✓ At that time, I tried to sing a song but I failed because I had already mentioned that my voice was not very clear.

The phrase 'That time' should be 'At that time' for correct preposition use. 'Already mentioned' requires past perfect 'had already mentioned' to indicate an action before another past action. 'Is not too much clear' is incorrect; it should be 'was not very clear' to match past tense and use proper adverb placement.

× Well, honestly I say that I do not like to sing a song but if I get a chance to sing then I definitely sing for my mother because it help to express my love toward my mother.

✓ Well, honestly, I say that I do not like to sing songs but if I get a chance to sing, then I will definitely sing for my mother because it helps to express my love toward her.

The modal verb 'will' is needed to express future intention. 'Sing a song' is better as 'sing songs' for general preference. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'my mother' is repeated unnecessarily; 'her' is more natural.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. It helps to represent their emotions. For example, when someone feels stressed, that time they can listen to or sing a song which boost their confidence and reduce their stress.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. It helps to express their emotions. For example, when someone feels stressed, they can listen to or sing a song which boosts their confidence and reduces their stress.

'Represent' is incorrect here; 'express' is the correct verb for emotions. 'That time' is unnecessary and awkward, so it is removed. 'Boost' and 'reduce' need to be in third person singular form 'boosts' and 'reduces' to agree with singular subject 'a song'.