唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然，有重复和语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达情感。

示例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me happy and helps me relax. Whenever I have something to celebrate or feel anxious, singing is my way to release stress.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用简单明了的句子，直接回答问题，并说明自学的情况。

示例: Honestly, I have never had formal singing lessons. I just try to learn by myself by following online tutorials, so I'm not very good, but I enjoy singing.

建议: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构稍显混乱。建议使用更流畅的表达，并注意时态和语法的正确。

示例: I want to sing for my family, friends, and close relatives—basically, the people who care about me and whom I care about.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: Yes, definitely. I like singing because it brings happiness to people. I believe singing is one of the best ways to express emotions, especially joy.

× Firstly I because singing could make me happy.

✓ Firstly, I like singing because it could make me happy.

句子缺少谓语动词，导致结构不完整。需要添加动词like来表达喜欢唱歌的意思。

× So when when I have some good things to celebrate I will choose seeing and also seeing could help me to relax.

✓ So when I have some good things to celebrate, I will choose singing and also singing could help me to relax.

动词形式错误，应该用动名词singing而不是seeing。seeing是看见的意思，与语境不符。

× When I feel some anxious I will choose the thing to release me and take my.

✓ When I feel anxious, I will choose something to release me and take my mind off things.

形容词使用错误，anxious前不需要some；句子不完整，缺少宾语，需补充完整表达。

× Honestly I have no opportunity to learn how to sing, just self study to follow the single tool to see.

✓ Honestly, I have had no opportunity to learn how to sing, just self-studied by following a singing tool.

时态错误，描述过去经历应使用现在完成时；动词形式和表达不准确，需调整为自学并使用singing tool。

× So I'm not very good at singing but I like it anymore.

✓ So I'm not very good at singing but I still like it.

anymore通常用于否定句或疑问句，肯定句中用still更合适。

× I just want to sing for my family, my friends and my close relatives, all the people I want who cared for me and I care for.

✓ I just want to sing for my family, my friends, and my close relatives, all the people who care for me and whom I care for.

关系代词使用错误，who和whom的使用需区分主格和宾格。

× Yes of definitely.

✓ Yes, definitely.

短语中多余的介词of，应删除。

× That's also the why I choose.

✓ That's also the reason why I choose it.

句子结构不完整，缺少名词reason和宾语it，导致表达不清。

× I like singing it because I can bring happiness to people because I think singing is the best way to express your emotions, especially the happiness.

✓ I like singing because I can bring happiness to people, as I think singing is the best way to express your emotions, especially happiness.

动名词后不需要it，句子中重复使用because导致冗余，需调整连接词使句子更通顺。